Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided line graph illustrates the previous and recent overweight rates as well as a prediction of upcoming overweight rate in nine different nations.

Overall, every country follows an upward trend as the usa has the highest proportion of overweight rate wheras korea has least percentage of overweight rate.

In detail, usa had nearly 45% of rate in 1970 which followed an upward trend and reached 75% in 2020. England had about 47% of overweight rate in 1990 which increases to 55% in 2000 and 70% in 2020. Moving to fata related to canada, 50% of overweight rate was recorded in 1995 incrasing only 5% in next 25 years. Also, spain and australia overweight started from 43% and 33% which reached to 55% and 65 % respectively.

Moving further, italy was having rate of 37%in 1995 which steadly increased to 39% before sharply increasing to 45%in 2020. And, france overweight rate increased to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the overall upward trend and the countries with the highest and lowest rates. However, the task is incomplete as the text ends abruptly mid-sentence ('france overweight rate increased to'). This failure to finish the summary and report on all data points significantly impacts the score. While the overview is present, the lack of completion means the task is not fully addressed. To improve, ensure all data groups are covered and the summary is brought to a logical conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In detail', and 'Moving further'. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete final sentence, which leaves the reader without a sense of closure. Referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of the transitions could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to connect the data points more fluidly rather than listing them sequentially.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'upward trend', 'proportion', and 'sharply increasing'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fata related to canada' (data) and 'usa had nearly 45% of rate' (a rate of 45%). The repetition of 'overweight rate' throughout the text limits the range. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise synonyms and ensuring correct collocations when describing statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('the usa', 'the korea'), incorrect preposition usage, and issues with subject-verb agreement ('italy was having rate'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after some percentages and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and article usage.

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