Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided information in line chart illustrates the past, present, and future projected overweight rate of OECD countries throughout the course of 50 years, from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, there were a dramatic rose in all the countries over the following decades. From the beginning 1970 to ending 2020 the entire states slightly increased it's overweight rate. All the counties are comparatively same trent especially Austria, Italy and the last but not the least France over the entire course of time.

Initially, there were only USAs record found which is approximately 47% in 1970, furthermore in mid 1980s we found Austria, Australia, France, Spain, England Italy, Korea, Canada where their starting overweight rate is between 25% to 50%.

In contrast, in 2020 the USAs was become the most highest overweight rate of about 73%, while Korea is the worst rate of about 34%, and the remaining countries are lie between 44% and 59%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the main features, but the analysis is inaccurate and lacks detail. For example, the claim that there was a 'dramatic rose' in all countries is not supported by the data, and the description of the trends is vague. The student fails to identify key data points or make meaningful comparisons between the countries. The summary of the 2020 data is also imprecise, and the mention of 'projected future' rates is not addressed in the body paragraphs. The response lacks a clear overview of the trends, and the information provided is insufficient to fully satisfy the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'the last but not the least' which is inappropriate for a formal report. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is an attempt to group information, the lack of clear logical flow between sentences makes the overall structure feel disjointed. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively support the development of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'the entire states slightly increased it's overweight rate' and 'the USAs was become the most highest'. The term 'worst rate' is also imprecise in this context. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, such as 'trend' (misspelled as 'trent') and 'proportion' or 'percentage'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision for an academic task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the USAs was become'), incorrect use of articles, and possessive forms ('it's' instead of 'its'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the run-on sentence in the second paragraph. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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