Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graph illustrates the comparison of between the weight among various countries from in between during the period 1970 to 2020. in percentage.

To commence with, it is observed that the higher obesity rate from all 9 countries USA, England and Australia is in too the lead since 1970 till 2020 which is approximately above 60% to 70% respectively. However, nations such as Austria, Italy and France consist pro of total population with overweight is steadily same that is 43% consistently from 1980 to 2020. Furthermore, Canada and Spain also showed the steady constantly unchanged among the year 1990 to 2020 about 55%. Atlast, Korea had showed the least effect of overweight started from year 2000 to 2020.

Overall, USA the countries like USA, England and Australia stayed as a dominant countries in aspect of overweightage whereas other countries had showed non uniformed or slightly changed over the years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies some main features, such as the high rates in the USA, England, and Australia, and the lower rates in Korea. However, the summary is incomplete and inaccurate. The data interpretation is flawed; for instance, stating that Austria, Italy, and France remained at 43% consistently from 1980 to 2020 ignores the trends shown in the graph. Furthermore, the response fails to mention the projected future rates, which is a key part of the prompt. The overview is also somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear synthesis of the overall trends across the nine countries.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', 'Overall'), they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not improve the flow of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the internal structure of the sentences makes it difficult to follow the comparison between countries. The transition between the introduction, body, and conclusion feels mechanical rather than natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'overweightage', 'non uniformed', and 'consist pro of total population'. The student struggles to use precise terminology for describing trends, relying on repetitive and imprecise language like 'steady constantly unchanged'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The given line graph illustrates the comparison of between the weight among various countries from in between during the period 1970 to 2020. in percentage.' The use of prepositions and articles is inconsistent, and there are many run-on or fragmented sentence structures. While the student attempts some complex sentences, they are frequently faulty, leading to a lack of control over grammar and punctuation.

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