Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares past and current overweight ratios. as well as a marked future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

USA was leading in overweighted proportion over the time from 1970 to 2020 with the figure from around 45% in 1970 to 73% in 2020. Whereas

Korea's overweight rates remained lowest over the time with proportion of around 25% in 2000 and 35% in 2020.

Overweight rates was fluctuated between Australia, Austria and Spain where Australia's overweight proportion was rose from around 35% to 55% between 1990 and 2020 by crossing Austria, Spain and Canada Australia became third top country in overweight rate.

overall, all countries overweight rates are increased over the past years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the trends in the USA and Korea, the analysis is superficial. You have not included the projected future data mentioned in the prompt, nor have you provided a comprehensive overview of the nine countries. The lack of sufficient detail and the failure to reach the word count limit mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you cover all aspects of the data provided and provide a more thorough comparison of the trends across all countries.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the abrupt transition 'Whereas' at the start of a sentence. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the connection between the ideas in the third paragraph is disjointed. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is smooth.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is somewhat repetitive and basic. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'overweighted proportion' instead of 'proportion of overweight people' and 'third top country' which is not standard academic phrasing. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to describe the trends with precision. To improve, focus on using more precise terms for describing data, such as 'significant increase', 'steady growth', or 'projected to reach'. Avoid using informal or non-standard phrasing when discussing statistical information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Overweight rates was fluctuated' (subject-verb agreement error), 'proportion was rose' (incorrect passive construction), and 'all countries overweight rates are increased' (incorrect tense and possessive usage). The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for describing data. Incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help improve your score.

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