Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of previous and current overweight rates, it also delineates the future prediction of overweight rates across nine different countries. all the countries had went through an upward trend through out the period.

To begin with, nearly 45% of people were overweighted in USA in previous years, which was massively increased in forthcoming years and reached its peak at around 75%. Similarly, England also gone through a massive inclined, reached at its highest point at a value of roughly 70% between 2010 to 2020. The proportion of people who were suffered with over weight in Canada reached it peak before had a slight decline in year 2000.

Furthermore, Italy and Spain had similar trend associated with overweight till 2020. 30% people were overweighted in France between 1980 to 1990 which reached at its maximum value at around approximately 45%. Likewise, Korea Australia and Austria also had same pattern reaching their peak before having significant increase.

Overall, while USA recorded the highest proportion overweighted individuals over the period, Korea was the country who had the lowest proportion of people with high weight.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides an overview of the trends, but it lacks precision in reporting data. While you identify the USA and Korea as the extremes, the descriptions of the trends are often vague or inaccurate. For example, stating that Canada 'reached its peak before had a slight decline in year 2000' is confusing and does not clearly reflect the data provided in the graph. Furthermore, the grouping of countries like 'Korea, Australia and Austria' as having the 'same pattern' is an overgeneralisation that fails to highlight the specific differences required for a high-scoring Task 1 response. To improve, focus on selecting key data points (start, end, and significant fluctuations) rather than attempting to describe every country in general terms.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused. For instance, 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore' are used, but the logical progression between sentences is often weak. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between countries is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that linking words are used to show logical relationships between ideas rather than just acting as signposts at the start of sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'overweighted' (should be 'overweight'), 'massively increased' (a bit informal), and 'massive inclined' (incorrect word form). The range of vocabulary is limited, and the repetition of words like 'peak' and 'proportion' suggests a need for more variety. To improve, focus on using accurate terminology for describing trends, such as 'a significant rise,' 'a gradual decline,' or 'fluctuated,' and ensure you use the correct parts of speech.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'all the countries had went through' (incorrect tense), 'England also gone through a massive inclined' (missing verb/incorrect form), and 'the country who had' (incorrect relative pronoun). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past and projected data. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will significantly boost your score.

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