Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table illustrates the rate of overwiwght people acrosss 9 various countries since 1970 to 2020. The ratres are demonstrated through the graph lines.
Usa has the most high number of overweight citizens in year 1970 and it was alone in that period of time.While in 1980 an another Eurpeon countryy Austria jumped in and it showd a stable line till 1990. Meanwhile during this time span 4 other countires alsao jumped in which includes England which showd increase in rate at a greater level,Australia also took a slow start while,Spain showd a down curved graph line, France also was more stable till mid duration to 200 than took a little boom meanwile Korea also joined whith an increased line at 2000 and more stable till 2010. Canda also appeared in between with a strike from 2010 to 20120.USA throught had had the most highest rate followed by England and Spain.Korea showed the least graph.
The table showed detailed journey of all the mentioned countries and their rate of increase or fluctuations in bars of overwight people/
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify key trends effectively. The description of the data is fragmented and often inaccurate, such as stating that the USA was 'alone' in 1970 or describing countries 'jumping in' at specific dates, which misinterprets the nature of the graph. The response lacks a clear summary of the main features, such as the overall upward trend in overweight rates across all countries. The information provided is often confusing and does not accurately reflect the data presented in the graph, leading to a failure to fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is ineffective, with the main body consisting of a single, dense paragraph that jumps between countries without a clear structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'jumped in' and 'showed'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data points. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between the past, current, and projected data points hinders the flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'overwiwght', 'acrosss', 'ratres', 'Eurpeon', 'showd', 'countires', 'alsao', 'whith', and 'Canda'. The word choice is often imprecise or inappropriate for an academic report, such as using 'took a little boom' or 'strike' to describe statistical trends. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision, and the persistent spelling errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'since 1970 to 2020'), and poor sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary punctuation, such as 'Australia also took a slow start while,Spain showd a down curved graph line'. The use of complex structures is attempted but is consistently inaccurate, leading to confusion. Simple sentences are also prone to errors, and the overall control of grammar is weak, which significantly hinders the clarity of the report.
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