Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

show the paragraph past and current overweight rates as compared to projected future overweight rates in nine countries.

overview,

1970 in USA a low rates in 50 percent and 1980 usa is high rates and time by time spent . USA a high rates and KOREA 1990 20 percent to increase in 30 percent in time spend 2020 and same other country in maximum .AUSTRALIA in 40 percent of 1980 is is high rate in USA compare then 1980 ENGLAND 2020 is a 45 percent to increase in 70 percent in future and SPAIN in 1980 is 40 percent to increase to 50 percent .AUSTRIA is 40 percent in 1980 increase a 45 percent. ITALY a 35 percent increase in future AUSTRALIA ,FRANCE in australia 35 percent in future increase rates an france a 30 percent in future a increase a rates i and high rates in usa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the content is largely a fragmented list of data points rather than a coherent summary. The overview is missing, and the response fails to identify the main trends or make meaningful comparisons between the nine countries. The data provided is often unclear or difficult to interpret due to the lack of structure. To improve, you must provide a clear overview of the main trends and group the countries logically rather than listing them individually without context. The failure to meet the length requirement and the lack of analytical depth result in a low score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no paragraph structure, and the text consists of disjointed sentences that make it difficult for the reader to follow the information. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the referencing is unclear (e.g., 'same other country in maximum'). The lack of a clear introduction or overview means the reader is not guided through the data. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing—one for the overview and one or two for the detailed comparisons—and use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'high', and 'rates'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'climb', 'peak', or 'projected'. Many phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'time by time spent', which obscures the meaning. To improve, you need to learn specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'a steady climb', 'a significant rise', or 'a projected increase'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise descriptors will help you convey information more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that impede communication. There is a lack of sentence structure; most of the text consists of fragments rather than complete, grammatically correct sentences. Issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect preposition usage are pervasive (e.g., 'USA a high rates', 'increase a 45 percent'). There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles and prepositions correctly. You should also work on combining simple sentences into more complex ones using relative clauses or conjunctions.

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