Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given task is in the form of line graph showing the information about overweight rates in past and currently along with projected future overweight rates in nine nations. The time period under observation are 1970 to 2020. The data is calibrated in percentage. It is clear and coherent representation.

Overall, in all the countries the data showed an uptrend. Whereas, the top position was notched by United States. However Korea ranked the least.

To commence with, in terms of proportion overweight the first place is secured by USA with above 10% followed by England with almost 70% in 2020. the data for Australia showed a drastic increase and rose to nearly 65% in 2020.

Getting into further details, the data for Canada, Spain, Austria, Italy, France and Korea ranged between 20% to Approximately 55% and rose with very slight percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you identified the main trends and provided some data points, the analysis is superficial. You failed to accurately report the data; for instance, stating England reached 'almost 70%' in 2020 is not supported by standard interpretations of such graphs, and the grouping of six countries into a single sentence lacks the necessary detail required for a Band 6 or higher. To improve, ensure you provide a more thorough overview and select specific, accurate data points to support your descriptions of trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'To commence with', 'Getting into further details'). The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of depth in the body paragraphs makes the overall flow feel disjointed. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to the main features of the graph.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. Phrases like 'notched by' and 'secured by' are used somewhat awkwardly in this context. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'calibrated in percentage' instead of 'measured in percentages'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoid repeating basic verbs. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'rank' will also help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'The time period under observation are 1970 to 2020' contains a subject-verb agreement error, and 'rose with very slight percentage' is grammatically incorrect. Additionally, there are missing articles and inconsistent capitalization throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without dangling modifiers or missing prepositions.

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