Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph tracks shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a project future overweight rate in nine countries.

Overall, it is clear that USA was the highest country of over the period while Korea was the smallest country in the overweight rates whereas others countries was least popular. In contrast USA was the higher than Korea and others countries.

In 1970 USA started at proportion overweight was approximately 48 while in 1980 to 2020 USA overweight rate 85 was steadily decreased over the period. In 1970 England rate was around by 49 whereas the period of 1980 to 2020 rate was the reached a peak of 75.In 1970 Canada rate was the approximately 59%. in 1980 to 2020 was sharply increased over the period.

Spain in 1970 to 2020 started at around 41 while at the end reached a around at 55.Australlia started at 39 in 1970 while in 2020 was the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the graph, but it fails to provide an accurate overview. The description of the data is significantly flawed, as the student misinterprets the trends (e.g., claiming the USA rate decreased when the graph shows an upward projection). Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which leaves the task unfinished. Key comparisons between the nine countries are missing, and the data points cited are often inaccurate or confusingly presented. To improve, focus on identifying the overall trends (increases vs. decreases) and ensure that the data reported matches the visual evidence provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'in 1970 to 2020' and 'over the period'. The lack of clear transitions between the overview and the body paragraphs makes the text difficult to follow. Additionally, the abrupt ending prevents the development of a coherent conclusion or a complete analysis of the data. Improving the use of linking words like 'whereas', 'subsequently', or 'in contrast' would help create a better flow between sentences and ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'highest', 'smallest', and 'increased', often using them incorrectly in context (e.g., 'USA was the highest country'). There are also issues with word choice, such as 'smallest country in the overweight rates', which is imprecise. Spelling errors, such as 'Australlia', further detract from the quality of the writing. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'others countries was'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'USA started at proportion overweight was approximately 48'). The use of complex structures is attempted but often results in ungrammatical phrases. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incomplete sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.

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