Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The linear graphs illusrates the proportion of past and projected future weight rates in nine selected nations over the period between 1970 and 2020.

Overall, the highest trend in rate of overweight rates followed by USA.Korea was the lowest among all the categorised countries with a starting year in 2000 and moved towards with slight increase in 2020.

In the year 1970, the only nation in obtaining future overweight rates with a noticable downward trend followed is USA by 45% but showed a significant growth by reaching upto 75% in the final year. In the mid of 1980s ,Austria had showed a constant rates by nearly 38% till the end of year 1990. After some oscillations it reached to 45% by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the summary is incomplete. You have only focused on a few countries (USA, Korea, Austria) and ignored the majority of the data presented in the graph. Furthermore, the description of the trends is somewhat inaccurate; for instance, you describe the USA as having a 'downward trend' in 1970, which is not supported by the data. To improve, ensure you cover all key features and provide a more comprehensive overview of the data trends across all categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between the overview and the specific details is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'In the mid of 1980s' and 'After some oscillations'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. To improve, use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping countries by similar trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'highest trend in rate of overweight rates' and 'obtaining future overweight rates'. The term 'oscillations' is used, but it is not the most natural choice for describing line graph trends. Spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'illusrates' and 'upto', are present. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe data, such as 'fluctuations', 'proportion', 'significant increase', and 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The linear graphs illusrates' (subject-verb agreement), 'followed by USA' (missing article), and 'had showed a constant rates' (incorrect verb tense and article usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and capitalization. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. Proofreading for common errors like tense consistency will also help improve your score.

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