Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph gives us information about the past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries fin the percentage from year 1970 to 2020.
A cursory glance at the graph is adequate enough to illustrate that the weight rate of USA was on peak. In year 1970, it was 45% percent, however it was decline slightly. Moreover, it was increase gradually. In England, it was 42% in the year 1985. It was show some fluctuation but then inclined marginally. In Spain and Canada, weight rate was drop gradually, however they were remain constant from the year 2005 to 2020.
Further looking at the graph it can be clearly seen that the Austria, Italy and France were show little bit fluctuation and remain constant the year 2000 to 2020. The weight rate of Australia abrupt climb. it was 32% in the year 1980. It was jumped 32% to 62 %. In addition to, weight rate of Korea was 225 in the year 2000 and it was climbed gradually,
After analyzing the graph, it can be noticed that the weight rate of USA was on peak whereas Korea was on loss.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it identifies some countries, the reporting of data is often inaccurate (e.g., stating the USA was 45% in 1970 when the graph shows a different starting point). The description of trends is inconsistent, and the summary at the end is too simplistic. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends—such as the general upward trajectory in most countries—rather than listing individual data points, which often leads to inaccuracies. Ensure your data extraction is precise and that you provide a clear, analytical overview in the introduction or conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as 'Further looking at the graph' or 'In addition to'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow which country is being discussed. The transition between sentences is abrupt, and the lack of sophisticated linking words hinders the flow of information. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus rather than just jumping between countries.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'weight rate' instead of 'overweight rate' or 'percentage', and 'abrupt climb' used as a verb phrase. Phrases like 'little bit fluctuation' are too informal for an Academic Task 1 response. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To improve, learn specific collocations for describing trends, such as 'a significant increase', 'a gradual decline', or 'remained stable'. Avoid informal language and focus on using more precise terminology related to statistics and graphs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'it was decline' instead of 'it declined') and subject-verb agreement. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'it was jumped 32% to 62%'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the use of active and passive voice for describing data. Review the rules for past tense when describing historical data and ensure your sentences are grammatically complete.
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