Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates that graph decreased in past years and current it can increased rating, in future the projected is increased in nine different countries.

Overall, the line graph describe about future project and shows the percentage, Furthermore, it can also show in past years and to make comparisons and take a report. some countries it can added USA, England, Canada, Spain, Italy, Australia, France, and Korea.

In 1970, USA rates approximately 50%, but in future after 50 years the rating is approximately75%. In 1992, Canada in past around 50% but in future approximately 65%. Korea in 1998, approximately 15% but in future around 35% in 2020.

Furthermore, Spain in 1985, around 42% in future overweight is approximately 52% in 2020. In 1988, France is 30% and it can overweight in future in 2020 approximately 43%. Austria closed to 40% in 1982, in future approximately 48% in 2020. Italy around in 1992, approximatelt 34% but it can

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by reporting data from the graph, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the main trends effectively. The summary is disjointed and lacks a coherent synthesis of the information. While some data points are mentioned, the selection is somewhat random and does not effectively compare the countries or identify the overall trajectory of overweight rates. The response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full analysis of the data. To improve, you should focus on grouping countries by similar trends and providing a clear, concise summary of the overall patterns observed across the nine countries.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the response is weak. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the flow of ideas is disjointed and lacks logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'in future' and 'it can'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the past and projected data. The abrupt ending further disrupts the coherence of the text. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'meanwhile', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic structures and imprecise terminology. Phrases like 'it can increased rating' and 'it can added' are grammatically incorrect and demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. There is little attempt to use academic vocabulary appropriate for describing data trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'climb', 'projected to reach', or 'significant increase'. The spelling of 'approximatelt' is also incorrect. To improve, you should study and practice using topic-specific vocabulary related to describing graphs and trends, and focus on using verbs and nouns that accurately convey the movement of data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragmented or poorly constructed (e.g., 'the line graph illustrates that graph decreased in past years'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there is a lack of variety in sentence structures. The use of tenses is also problematic, as the distinction between past data and future projections is not clearly articulated through correct verb forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and correctly using tenses to distinguish between past and future time frames.

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