Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph depicts past and current overweight rates , as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries .

Overall , it is crystal clear that the percentage of overweight rates were risen in England , USA , Australia as compared to other countries .

At the fleeting glance , it is evident that in the year of 1972 , 45% overweight rates were selected in OECD countries and it was sharply increasing year by year . In the mid of 1980 , Spain and Austria also came under overweight rate ranging from 40% to 48% repectively . In year 1990 , the proportion of overweight rates in England , Australia and France was 48%, 32% and 30% orderly . Australia was rise steeply in upcoming years . Austria remained stable till 2000. Mid of 1990 ,the percentage of overweight rates in following countries Canada , Italy and Korea ranged from 20% to 50% respectively . In year 2010 , all the given countries were growing rapidly with year . After a decade , Austria and Italy were remained same upto 2020 . The proportion of Canada and Spain were also approximately ranging same that was 54% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. While you identify the main trend, the specific data points provided are frequently inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, stating that '45% overweight rates were selected in OECD countries' in 1972 is a misinterpretation of the graph's data points. Furthermore, the description of trends is often vague or contradictory, such as claiming countries were 'growing rapidly' while simultaneously stating they 'remained same'. To improve, focus on selecting key data points that clearly illustrate the overall trends and ensure that the figures cited accurately reflect the information presented in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'At the fleeting glance' or 'orderly' to describe a list of percentages. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences do not always connect logically to the previous ones. To improve, use more natural linking words like 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Subsequently' to guide the reader through the data, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'were risen' and 'were remained same' demonstrate a lack of control over verb forms and collocations. The word 'orderly' is used inappropriately to describe a list of figures, and 'fleeting glance' is not a standard academic phrase for introducing an overview. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the frequent errors in word choice and collocation make the writing feel unnatural. Focus on learning standard phrases for describing graphs, such as 'showed a steady increase' or 'remained relatively stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, particularly with verb tenses and passive voice constructions. Examples include 'percentage of overweight rates were risen' (should be 'had risen' or 'rose') and 'Australia was rise steeply' (should be 'rose steeply'). The sentence structures are often repetitive and contain errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, practice the correct use of active versus passive voice and ensure subject-verb agreement. Focus on constructing simple, error-free sentences before attempting more complex structures, as the current frequency of errors is quite high.

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