Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph illustrates past, current as well as projected future overweight rate in selected OECD countries. The data has been

calibrated in percentage.

Overall, the proportion of overweight people increased in most countries over the period. The USA had the highest rate while Korea recorded

the lowest figures.

At a fleeting glance, The USA started from 47% in 1970 and in the last year, the percentage of overweight people sharply boost

at 73%. Followed by England accounted for 47% in 1990 and in 220 the percentage reached at 70%. Canada also showed significantly grown from almost 50% in 1990 and 55% in 2020. Austria and Italy had lower than 40% in their first year. In the last they remained same at

arround 45%.

Moving further, Spain showed a gradually increase during the period. In early of 1990 Spain made up 42% and in 2020 slowly went up at around 55%. France ranging from 30% to 43% It showed considerably increased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, identifying the USA as the highest and Korea as the lowest. However, the task achievement is limited by inaccurate data reporting. For instance, stating the USA reached 73% in the 'last year' (2020) is inaccurate based on the graph, and the mention of '220' for England is a clear typo. Furthermore, the analysis of the data is somewhat superficial; while it mentions some countries, it fails to provide a comprehensive comparison of the projected future rates as requested by the prompt. The summary is present, but the selection of key features lacks precision and consistency.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a logical progression from the overview to specific country details. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'At a fleeting glance' and 'Moving further'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences feels disjointed in the latter half of the essay. While the paragraphing is sufficient, the internal flow of ideas needs more sophisticated linking words to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of incorrect word forms or collocations, such as 'sharply boost at 73%' (should be 'sharply increased to 73%') and 'showed significantly grown' (should be 'showed significant growth'). The range of vocabulary is limited to basic descriptive terms. To improve, you should focus on using more precise verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a marginal increase', rather than relying on repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The data has been calibrated in percentage' (should be 'percentages'), 'in 220' (likely a typo for 2020), and 'In early of 1990' (should be 'In the early 1990s'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band level.

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