Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided line graph illustrates the percentage of overweight rates during the certain period of time as well as prediction across the countries which is member of OECD.

Overall, graph showing upward trend throughout the decade after certain year. Fewer countries fluctuation during certain period.

USA have notable increase after 1980 to 2020 , which is more than 70% , which makes it leading compare to other countries. In 2000, all countries are stable compare to their past rates. France and Australia are least rates in 1990. Australia showing drastically increase afterwards. Korea is always been less compare to other countries which is between 20% to 40% ranges. by 2020, only England and USA are only country which cross 70%. Canada is only country which little bit showing downward from 1990 to 2000. Spain once a time have downward during 2000 to 2010 which is nearly 45%. France has been always percentage rates between 30% to 50%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies some main features, such as the upward trend and the USA's leading position. However, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the data. The description of the trends is often imprecise, for example, stating 'all countries are stable' in 2000, which is not supported by the graph. Furthermore, the report fails to effectively compare the countries, often listing them individually rather than grouping them by shared trends or significant differences. The lack of specific data points or clear time-frame references makes the summary less informative.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is vague, and the body paragraphs lack clear topic sentences or a logical flow. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'which is' and 'which makes it'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The overall structure feels like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'rates', and 'countries'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Fewer countries fluctuation' and 'France and Australia are least rates'. The phrasing is often awkward, which occasionally impedes the clarity of the information. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'climb', 'plateau', or 'significant growth', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('USA have', 'only England and USA are only country'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. Complex sentences are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'USA have notable increase after 1980 to 2020 , which is more than 70% , which makes it leading compare to other countries.' These errors are persistent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to grasp. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is necessary.

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