Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illiterate the past and current overweight rates in the nine countries projected in future as well as different years .
Overall, the first country USA is the high in the projection overweight in the year 1970 is 45% then increase in different years as soon as highest in the year 2020 on the top in 75% . The next country is England is starting in 1990 on the 45% and the last overweight in 2020 is 70%. The third country is Spain is run in 1988 in the stand on the 42% and the stand on the 2020 on the 53% . The Canada is up on the 50% in the 1995 and the 2020 in the stand on the same country Spain. The Austria, Australia and France is same percentage in the 2020 and the starting point is different years. The Korea and Italy is stand in different years and end in the same years and same percentage on it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. The information is presented as a list of individual data points rather than a synthesis of the graph's features. Several figures are inaccurate or poorly described (e.g., 'the first country USA is the high in the projection'), and the report lacks a coherent comparison of the nine countries. The response focuses on listing numbers rather than identifying significant patterns, such as the general upward trend across all nations. To improve, you must group data logically and highlight the most significant changes or similarities rather than describing every country in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in the year' and 'is stand on'. The lack of linking words makes the text feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use a wider variety of transition signals (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one to create a clear narrative.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'illiterate' instead of 'illustrate', 'the high' instead of 'the highest', and 'is run in' or 'is stand on' which are not standard English. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately, relying on basic verbs like 'is' or 'increase'. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'showed a steady growth', and avoid repeating the same basic sentence structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences missing articles, using incorrect prepositions, or failing to use correct verb tenses (e.g., 'The Canada is up on the 50%'). Subject-verb agreement is also inconsistent. There is almost no attempt at complex sentence structures, and the existing simple sentences are frequently flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct use of articles, and practicing the correct tense for describing past and projected data.
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