Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates information about past and current overweight rates and projected future overweight rate in nine selected OECD countries.

Overall, the graphs shows the overweight proportion of USA remained highest throughout the period whereas, Korea represents the lowest rates over the fifty years. All other countries comparatively makes up the contribution in between of these two.

Regarding the soared percentage in selected OECD countries, USA showed significantly the increased contribution of 45% to 75% from 1970 to 2020, respectively. On the other hand, England and Australia accounted for the second and third highest rate for past and projected future rates as 69% and 62% throughout the period. Comparatively, Korea had the least accountability of 35% for overweight rates. All other countries such as(Spain, Canada, Austria, Italy and France) remained in a steady and stable trend with percentage present between the prior mentioned countries during the whole journey.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you identify the main trends and provide some data points, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You mention the USA, Korea, England, and Australia, but the grouping of the other five countries as 'steady and stable' is an over-generalisation that lacks specific supporting data. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed breakdown of the figures and ensure the response meets the length requirement to fully develop your points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas is slightly disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is present, such as 'Regarding' and 'On the other hand', but some transitions feel mechanical. The paragraphing is acceptable, but the body paragraph is quite dense and would benefit from being split to separate the specific country comparisons more clearly. Referencing is generally clear, though the parenthetical list of countries in the final sentence is a bit informal for an academic report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. Phrases like 'least accountability' are misused in this context, as 'accountability' refers to responsibility rather than statistical representation. Other phrasing, such as 'soared percentage' and 'increased contribution', is slightly unnatural. You have attempted to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but there are consistent issues with word choice and collocation that occasionally hinder the clarity of your report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the graphs shows' (subject-verb agreement), 'comparatively makes up the contribution' (awkward phrasing), and 'percentage present between' (incorrect preposition usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often clunky. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and more natural sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.

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