Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates information about overweight people in selected countries like england, usa, italy, australia, france and korea between 1970 and 2020. It expressed in percentage around 20 to 80 scale.

Overall, the highest OECD individual country is USA among of all other overweight rates. Compared to other countries, Korea have least in term of overweight category

On the one hand, In year 1970 USA is the higher overweight rate around 50%, then gradually increase 10% in each year and close up to 75% till year 2020. whereas England and spain ,australia and france has seen rise between 1980 to 1990 and remain constant till 2010.

on the other hand, Korea had slightly increase in 2000 from 30% , which goes up to 35% and remain unchanged till 2020. futhermore Italy, canada increased marginally 5% each year and remain stable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the graph, the analysis is superficial and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data trends (e.g., claiming the USA increased by 10% each year, which is not supported by the graph). The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail to fully satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1. To improve, ensure you carefully read the data points and provide a more comprehensive summary that highlights key trends and significant comparisons rather than listing individual country data points in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is hindered by the lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand' are used, but they do not logically connect the contrasting information effectively in this context. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas feels mechanical rather than fluid. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that contributes to the overall summary of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'increase' and 'remain' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'close up to 75%' and 'least in term of overweight category'. Furthermore, there are several errors in capitalization (e.g., 'england', 'usa', 'italy') and spelling (e.g., 'futhermore'). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', or 'significant growth', and ensure proper noun capitalization.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Korea have least'), missing articles (e.g., 'In year 1970'), and incorrect preposition usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors, such as 'It expressed in percentage around 20 to 80 scale'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses for past and future projections, and ensure that your sentences are grammatically complete.

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