Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph show's the different kinds of weights. the main countries are USA,ENGLAND,SPAIN,AUSTRIA,AUSTRALIA,FRANCE,KOREA,ITALY and CANADA.

by the year 1970 USA was the emerging weight country.so till 2020 it was near to 75%.the other counties like mentioned above were progressing from stable to rise or downfall.

The AUSTRIA was uniform from the year [redacted phone].italy has also played major role from month year 1995 till 2020.france didn't have strong weight increase and this country had taken less years to reach the overweight stage.

The KOREA came in development in the later stage's of the century. weight of there country was balanced properly.so by the time of 2020 the weight only increased to 35%.the CANADAstayed till only 55% throughout the year.

From all the other countrie's like USA was the major state for overweight increase. AUSTRALIA was an island didn't have enough impact on the weights.it only increased to 63% throughout the 2020.all of them have great impact on the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The information is presented in a fragmented way, focusing on individual countries rather than comparing the overall trends or grouping them by similar patterns. The data interpretation is often inaccurate; for example, describing the USA as an 'emerging weight country' is vague and does not use the data effectively. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear summary of the key features, such as the general upward trend across most countries. To improve, you must identify the most significant changes and compare the countries rather than listing them individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. Paragraphs are not used effectively to group information, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt or confusing. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'the' and 'and' to connect ideas. The referencing is also unclear; for instance, 'the other counties like mentioned above' does not clearly link to the previous sentence. The overall structure is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the data points provided in the graph.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'emerging weight country' and 'played major role from month year' are unnatural and do not accurately describe the data. There is a lack of precise terminology related to graphs, such as 'trend,' 'fluctuate,' 'peak,' or 'proportion.' Additionally, there are frequent errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'weight' instead of 'overweight rates' or 'overweight stage.' You need to expand your range of academic vocabulary to describe statistical data more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph show's'), incorrect punctuation (e.g., 'USA,ENGLAND,SPAIN'), and misuse of articles. Sentence structures are simple and often repetitive, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Errors such as 'The AUSTRIA was uniform' and 'The KOREA came in development' demonstrate a lack of control over basic English grammar. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, correct article usage, and proper punctuation before attempting more complex structures.

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