Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the ratio of overweight in different years in nine nations.
Overall, Usa was top on the list for overweight proportion and Korea is at bottom in future.
From 1970 to year 2000 except Korea other countries percentage was over 30. Moreover,France and Australia was approximately on similar ratio in 1990 while the proportion was highly surged for Australia in 2020 for 63. Austria, Italy, France are noted to be similar in overweight percentage which is under 50.
Canada was on peak in 1995 as compared to other nations with the ratio of 50 whereas it rise up in future along with Spain for about 55%. Apart from this,the second most overweight projection for England in 2020 with the proportion of 70%. USA was also seems to increase in ratio of overweight people after starting year which was below 50 and in future the ratio cross 70%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph regarding past, current, and projected overweight rates in nine countries. However, the selection of data is somewhat haphazard and lacks a clear overview or fully developed comparisons. The student mentions extremes like the USA and Korea, and touches upon specific years such as 1990 and 2020. Yet, many figures are inaccurate or poorly contextualised against the visual data provided. For instance, the statement that France and Australia were on a similar ratio in 1990 is not properly supported by key comparative analysis. The overview sentence is overly brief and lacks detail. Therefore, the response demonstrates a partial overview and meets the criteria for Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into four paragraphs, including a brief introduction and conclusion-like body sections, but the overall progression lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are used sporadically and often inaccurately, such as 'Moreover', 'Apart from this', and 'In future'. The referencing between sentences is weak, making it difficult to follow the logical development of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion and fail to group related information effectively. While there is a basic attempt to structure a report, the mechanical and faulty use of cohesive links places this response firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'ratio', 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'countries'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'Usa was top on the list', 'at bottom in future', and 'the proportion was highly surged'. While the range is sufficient to convey a general topic, the lack of precision and the presence of noticeable errors in word formation ('rise up' instead of 'rose') restrict the score. The lexical control is minimally adequate for the task, corresponding to a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are multiple grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in future', 'for England'), incorrect prepositions ('on the list', 'at bottom'), and tense inconsistencies (mixing past and present references when discussing historical data). For example, 'USA was also seems to increase' contains a tense and verb agreement error. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures, aligning with Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.
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