Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph below describes previous and present overweight prices, as well as a predicted upcoming overweight prices in nine selected countries.

In this graph describes overweight prices in nine selected countries. The overweight rates in USA is slightly high.Acoording to this graph korea is deleberately lowest overweight rates.

In the year of 1970 overweight rates USA holds highest rates throughout the entire timeline. USA starts less then 50 percent increases steadily and reach graph peak less then 80 percent in year of 2020.In 1980 to 1990 , USA holds highest overweight rate according to graph timeline.England holds less then USA rates.France has lowest overweight rates in 1980 to 1990.In 1990 to 2000, the highest overweight rate in USA almost 60 percent. Korea has lowest rates almost less then 30 percent according to graph timeline. In 2000 to 2010, the highest overweight rates in USA almost 70 percent. korea holds lowest rates in 2000 to 2010. In 2010 to 2020, also USA holds highest rates almost 75%. According to graph timeline korea has lowest overweight rates in the years of 2010 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting on the overweight rates in nine selected countries over a period of time. However, it fails to meet several key criteria for a higher band. First, the term 'overweight prices' is used incorrectly throughout instead of 'rates' or 'proportions'. Second, the overview of the main trends is extremely weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall picture. Instead of selecting key features and comparing countries effectively, the writer lists data decade by decade in a repetitive and mechanical manner, heavily focusing on the USA and Korea while barely mentioning other countries such as England or France. According to the official band descriptors, this reflects Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially, details are mechanical, and comparisons are largely absent.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression and effective paragraphing. The response begins with two repetitive introductory sentences ('The line graph below describes...' followed immediately by 'In this graph describes...'). The body of the text is grouped into a single, dense block of sentences rather than being clearly divided into logical paragraphs by time periods or key trends. Furthermore, cohesive devices are weak and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'according to graph timeline' and 'In the year of...'. There is no clear flow of ideas, making it difficult for the reader to follow a coherent argument or comparison. This corresponds to Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The most glaring error is the consistent misuse of the word 'prices' instead of 'rates' or 'proportions' ('overweight prices'). Other lexical choices are imprecise or incorrect, such as 'USA holds highest rates' and 'korea is deleberately lowest overweight rates' (where 'deleberately' is both misspelled and semantically wrong). There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'Acoording', 'deleberately', 'less then') and a very limited range of vocabulary suitable for describing graphical data. This falls squarely into Band 4, as basic vocabulary is used repetitively and errors frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely limited, consisting mainly of simple, repetitive sentence structures ('USA holds highest rates...', 'England holds less...', 'Korea has lowest rates...'). There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, prepositions, articles, and comparative structures (e.g., 'less then 50 percent increases steadily and reach graph peak', 'In the year of 1970 overweight rates USA holds...'). Punctuation is also faulty, with missing commas and run-on structures. Because the majority of sentences contain grammatical or mechanical errors that impede smooth reading and the range of structures is very restricted, the performance aligns with Band 4.

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