Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph displays the current and the projected proportions of overweight from 1970 to 2020, in the OECD countries.

overall, the USA and Australia are the most markable countries with the higher figures of overweight, in Contrast to France, Korea and Italy.

to begin, USA marked about 50% of overweight then it slightly decrease to roughly 40%in the beginning of 1980, Then there is a sharpky increase hitting a peak of more than 70%. furthermore, austria leveled off between 1980 and 2000, then there was a slight rose, Korea, Italy, France, Canada and spain are less changeable in the figures, compared with Australia that was in about 30%. but in the beginning of 2000s, saw a significant increase reaching the 60 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 123 words. While the student attempts an overview and mentions several countries such as the USA, Australia, and Korea, the data selection is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies, such as stating the USA started at about 50% in 1970 when the graph begins at 45% in 1972. The overview captures broad trends, but key features lack adequate extension and precise data support, leading to a Band 5 score under the task achievement criteria.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text suffers from poor paragraphing and a lack of clear overall progression. The entire response is essentially clumped into an introduction and a single massive body paragraph that rushes through multiple countries without a logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing, mechanical, or incorrect, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters and using abrupt transitions like 'to begin' and 'furthermore'. Referencing is also faulty, making it difficult for the reader to track which data points correspond to which countries.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent awkward phrasing such as 'most markable countries', 'higher figures of overweight', and 'less changeable in the figures'. There are noticeable word-choice errors, including 'sharpky increase' and 'slight rose'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary, the limited control and frequent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex structures that frequently contain errors. Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled, with sentences starting with lowercase letters (e.g., 'the line graph', 'to begin') and run-on sentences joined by commas instead of proper conjunctions or full stops (e.g., 'Korea, Italy, France, Canada and spain are less changeable... compared with Australia that was in about 30%. but in the beginning of 2000s, saw...'). These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

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