Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the trends of the rates of being overwheight in past and present. It also includes the trends which depicts the future statistics. The data is recorded for nine OECD countries.

In terms of USA,the propotion of obese people have linearly increased from around 45% to about 75%, with the ocassional dip around at about 43%. This data was collected around 1980 to 2020. A similar trend is observed for Spain and Itlay. Both the countries have show an increase in the amount of overweight people. The statistics for spanish start around 40% to about 55%, with the dip around 45% in 2010. This dataset is recorded and predicted between the years 1987 and 2018. Whereas for Italians the data is given during the period of 1995 to 2018. The percentage starts around 38% to rises till 45%.

In terms of England, France, Australia and Korea, a similar pattern is observed. All countries see a linear increase in the overweight population. England an Autralia both observe about a 25% increase in overwheight population. The data recorded is from 1990 and 1985 respectively to 2018. Where as France and korea experience a 15% rise. The data is available from 1990 and 1995 repectively till 2019.

Lastly, Canada and Austria have an overall 5% increase. The datasets given from 1995 and 1990 repectively till 2019 and 2020 respectively.

Overall, the largest propotion of overweight people are Americans and least numbers are for Koreans. The steepestt rise in the percentage is recorded for USA and the most steady rise is recorded for Canada.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the countries. You successfully identified key extremes, such as the highest rates in the USA and the lowest in Korea, and provided an overview. However, there are some minor data inaccuracies regarding specific years and percentages; for instance, the USA rate starts around 45% in 1972 rather than 1980, and some end years differ slightly from the visual data. Nevertheless, the main trends are adequately captured and supported with relevant figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introduction, groups countries into logical categories in the body paragraphs (e.g., grouping England, France, Australia, and Korea), and concludes with a clear overview. Cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'Whereas', and 'Lastly' are used to connect ideas effectively, although paragraphing could be slightly more balanced and referencing is occasionally a bit mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using appropriate terms such as 'trends', 'proportion', 'statistics', and 'linearly increase'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'overwheight', 'propotion', 'ocassional', 'Itlay', 'spanish', 'Autralia', 'repectively', 'steepestt') and some minor word choice issues. These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the score from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures like 'While for Italians the data is given...' and 'All countries see a linear increase...'. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'The statistics for spanish start around' and 'The datasets given from 1995 and 1990 repectively till 2019'. Punctuation and article usage also need attention, but the errors rarely impede overall comprehension.

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