Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates the information of people from nine countries and elaborating the fat percentage per person from past data to future expected rates. USA, England, Canada, France, Korea, Italy, Austria, Australia, Spain from year 1970 to 2020.

Korea scored the least proportion of fat from year 1970 to 1990 with stable 25%, in year 2000 chart has shown slight growth which remained 30% for a decade and later scored 35% in 2020. However, USA was the most fat populated country among all nine with almost double in 1970 to frquently rise 75% in 2020.

Austrai, Australia, Italy and France were remained under 50% till 2020% shows mid range balanced. Lastly re

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 112 words, which fails to meet the 150-word minimum requirement. This severely limits the extent to which the task can be completed. While the student attempts to report some main features—such as identifying Korea as having the lowest rates and the USA as the highest—the overview is disjointed, and the response cuts off mid-sentence ("Lastly re"). Important details and thorough comparisons between the selected countries are missing. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The organization of the text is weak and disjointed. The response lacks clear paragraphing, grouping unrelated ideas together, and the abrupt ending ("Lastly re") demonstrates a complete breakdown in overall progression. While some basic cohesive devices are attempted ("However"), referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow hinders readability. The logical sequencing of information is compromised, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points presented across the various countries.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terminology such as "fat percentage," "proportion," and "growth," which are not entirely precise for discussing overweight rates in an academic context. There are also notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as "most fat populated country" instead of "the country with the highest proportion of overweight individuals." While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a very basic meaning, the lack of control over less common vocabulary keeps the score at this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is restricted, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex structures. There are several noticeable errors in grammar, tense usage, and prepositions throughout the text, such as "illustrates the information of people... and elaborating" (parallelism/form error) and "Australia, Italy and France were remained" (incorrect passive voice). Additionally, sentence fragments and uncompleted thoughts heavily disrupt the flow. Punctuation is also erratic, particularly in the fractured final sentence.

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