Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given line charts dipict information about past and current highweight rates,as well as projected future overweight rate in nine different countries.

Overall,there are nine selected countries one of the highest was USA. However the korea was the least.

There are nine different countries the first countries was USA was recorded at 45% in 1970. While the Austria was recorded at almost 40%.The french was ratio at over 30%.whilst, the italy was at 35% and that are also similar at the last year. while,the spain was percentage at over40% that are also similar at the all years.Whilst,England was recorded at 49%.

Moving to tge rest of the imformation,the next country was canada recorded at 55%.Australia was recorded at similar with canadaat55%.according to the give chart are most was the rate of USA highest in all the years and the korea was the least at all the years and they are also similar with italy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the task by identifying several countries and referencing the highest (USA) and lowest (Korea) rates, fulfilling the basic requirement of an overview. However, the data presentation is highly confused, inaccurate, and lacks a coherent selection of main features. For instance, the student states that Canada was recorded at 55% and Australia was similar, but misinterprets various points across the graph. The overview is rudimentary and the details provided are often inaccurate or disconnected from the actual visual data. Consequently, this falls under Band 4 as it responds to the task only minimally and lacks a fully developed report of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe issues in organisation and paragraphing. The text is broken into short, disjointed sentences and abrupt paragraphs that fail to guide the reader logically through the data. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the frequent misuse of 'while' and 'whilst' (e.g., 'While the Austria was recorded... The french was ratio... whilst, the italy was at 35%'). Referencing is frequently unclear, and the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. These flaws place the response firmly at Band 4, as information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes ('dipict', 'highweight', 'imformation', 'canadaat55') and incorrect word forms ('The french was ratio', 'the spain was percentage'). There is very little flexibility or precision, and the student relies heavily on simple terms directly lifted from the prompt or misremembered. While some everyday vocabulary is present, the frequent lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and errors frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent and severe errors. There are numerous punctuation errors, missing articles (e.g., 'the korea', 'the italy'), and faulty sentence structures (e.g., 'that are also similar at the last year', 'according to the give chart are most was the rate of USA highest in all the years'). These errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, aligning the response with the Band 4 descriptor where errors are frequent and grammatical control is weak.

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