Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph depicts information about past and current overweight rates, as well as future rates in nine several nations.
Overall, it is that USA, England and Canada project rates had increased, while rates in Spain and Italy remained same. The most significant change was showed in France.
At the beginning of the period in 1970 USA and England stood at 48%overweight proportion and the proportion was slightly raised in every decade until 2020. Where they hold around 75% and 70% proportion respectively.While Spain and Canada had equal number of proportion in 2000 which is approximately 45%and bot share similar data until the end.
On the other hand, in 2000 Korea had only 25% overweight proportion of total and surged slightly every year, in 2020 it holds approximately 35% segment. In similar vein, Italy had 35% fraction of total overweight in 1990 and then it remained constant for several years, after 2010 it increased at 45%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to provide an overview and summarize the main features of the line graph, meeting the minimum word count with 156 words. However, the overview is grammatically incomplete and factually confused ("it is that USA, England and Canada project rates had increased, while rates in Spain and Italy remained same"). Furthermore, several data points are misread or inaccurately reported against the provided visual data, such as claiming the USA and England stood at 48% in 1970 when the data shows the USA at 45% in 1972 and England starting later in 1991. The response covers some parts of the task, but the information is poorly selected and lacks accuracy in reporting comparisons and trends, placing it at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence constructions, such as starting the overview with "Overall, it is that...". Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inaccurately (e.g., "Where they hold...", "In similar vein"). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, resulting in disjointed ideas and unclear referencing. Overall, the coherence and cohesion reflect Band 5.0 characteristics due to the lack of clear progression and faulty logical links.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited and repetitive range of vocabulary suited to the task, using basic terms like "rates", "proportion", "increase", and "surge". There are noticeable lexical and collocation errors, such as "nine several nations", "remained same", "equal number of proportion", and "bot share similar data". Word forms are sometimes misused (e.g., "project rates had increased" instead of "projected rates"). These errors and the restricted vocabulary range cause occasional difficulty for the reader, aligning with the descriptors for Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex forms are faulty and marred by frequent grammatical errors. Examples include "it is that USA, England and Canada project rates had increased", "Where they hold around 75% and 70% proportion respectively" (fragment sentence), and punctuation errors like missing spaces after commas (e.g., "45%and bot"). Tense control is frequently unstable, mixing past and present inappropriately. Due to the high frequency of grammatical mistakes that impede clarity, this falls into the Band 5.0 category.
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