Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the comparison of past and future overweight ratio of the selected countries such as USA,Canada,England,Italy,Australia,Austria,Spain,France and Korea,between the years of 1970 to 2020 the graph initially shows that USA in 1970, 45% of the population was overweight and in between the years 1975 and 1980 the percentage droped for about 5%.Since then tge percentage of people being overweight has increased and increased every year till 2020. Then comes Austria,in 1982 the ratio was 39% but since then it has increased for about 6 to 7%.furthermore we have Spain, the graph shows that the percentage for Spain in 1985 was 43 but over the years has increased to 65%.Then comes Australia and France that have very similar ststes in the begining it shows 30% for france and 33 for australia but since then their has been a very drastic increase in Australia's overweight ratio it has reached to 64% since then while france has only 11% increase.then comes England which started with 48% in 1990 but now its almost 70%.then we have Canada and Italy both had same states initially but Italy had very less changes wil Canada had some ups and downs since the and this leaves us with Korea which had the least ratio 25% only and increased to 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the main trends from the line graph across the nine selected countries, but it struggles significantly with data accuracy and organization. For instance, the writer claims that Spain increased 'to 65%', whereas the graph shows it reaching approximately 55%. Furthermore, important information is either misread or poorly synthesized, such as stating France had an '11% increase' or detailing minor country-by-country data points without establishing a coherent overview of overall trends. While the prompt's countries are mentioned, the lack of an overarching summary and numerous inaccuracies in data reporting prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a major structural flaw: it is written as one continuous, single paragraph without any paragraph breaks. This makes the progression difficult to follow and visually overwhelming. Cohesive devices are weak, repetitive, and overly reliant on colloquial transitions like 'Then comes Austria' or 'then we have Canada'. There is a lack of clear logical organization, as the data jumps haphazardly between countries without a structured grouping by trends or time periods. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors further disrupt the flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'ratio', 'percentage', 'increased', and 'comes'. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, but these are often used inaccurately or unidiomatically, such as 'very similar ststes' or 'very less changes'. Word choice and collocations lack precision. Spelling mistakes are also present throughout the response (e.g., 'droped', 'tge', 'ststes', 'wil'). The lexical range is adequate only for very basic communication and lacks the flexibility expected for Academic Task 1.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the response is characterized by pervasive run-on sentences and comma splices. For example, the entire text is essentially linked by commas rather than proper periods or subordinate clauses (e.g., 'Then comes Austria, in 1982 the ratio was 39% but since then...'). There is a very limited range of complex structures attempted, and those that are attempted are frequently faulty. Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled throughout the piece. Grammatical errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning.

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