Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph depicts the information about past and present overweight rates in nine selected countries.

Overview, the past and present overweight has increased the given period.

After analyzing, it can be clearly seen that in 1970 proportion of overweight in Korea is approximatly 35%, whereas in 1980 in France percentage is increase in 25%.The highest percentage in overweight in Australia is 65%in year 1990,in the next year 2000 the Spain is descresed in 55% to 45%,in 2010 England is descresed in overwieght 70% given the time period.

Moving further towards the remaining data,Canada is increased in overweught in 55%in the 1990, afterthat, in 1990 overweight in Italy is increased in 45%, in the next year 1970 Korea is incresed to 2020 in overweight, in the 1980 France is descreased in 45%, in 1970 the USA is highest increased in 75% in the given period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning various countries and years. However, the data points reported contain severe inaccuracies and are largely fabricated or misread. For instance, the student states that in 1970 the proportion in Korea was approximately 35%, whereas the graph shows no data for Korea in 1970 (data begins in 1998 at 25%). Furthermore, many comparative features are unclear or factually incorrect based on the reference data. Additionally, the word count is 145 words, which falls short of the minimum 150-word requirement, resulting in a minor penalty for length. These factors limit the task response significantly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the response is extremely weak. The overview sentence is incomplete ('Overview, the past and present overweight has increased the given period.') and paragraphing is poorly handled, with a lack of logical progression between sentences. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. The transition phrases like 'Moving further towards the remaining data' introduce disjointed and chaotic statements that fail to structure the data meaningfully.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'increased', and 'decreased'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'percentage is increase in 25%' and 'the USA is highest increased in 75%'. Spelling and word formation are also problematic throughout the response, which strains the reader's comprehension at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures attempted, most of which contain fundamental errors. There are numerous missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'the Spain is descresed'), and poor sentence boundaries. Complex structures are either absent or constructed incorrectly, resulting in frequent errors that frequently impede communication and distort the intended meaning of the sentences.

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