Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line chart illustrates changes past and current overweight rates, projected the future rates in OECD countries from 1970 to 2020.
Looking first at the USA the figure stood at 45% in year 1970. It then fall to 43 percentage in next decade . After that, it increased dramatically reaching 75 percent proportion of overweight by 2020. Meanwhile, England started at 45 % and climbed to 70 percentage at the end of the period.
Turning to canada the figure was initially. It fluctuated/varied between [NUMBER] and [NUMBER] before reaching [NUMBER] at the end of the period.
By contrast, [CATEGORY 4] remained stable/stayed relatively unchanged at around [NUMBER] throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, containing only 110 words, which fails the minimum 150-word requirement. Furthermore, the draft includes unfulfilled template placeholders such as '[NUMBER]' and '[CATEGORY 4]'. While the student attempts to introduce the chart and provide some data points for the USA and England, the lack of completion, undeveloped overview, and unfinished body paragraphs prevent any thorough coverage of the prompt's requirements. Consequently, the task achievement is strictly limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text begins with standard introductory cohesion ('Looking first at', 'Meanwhile'), but the organization breaks down completely in the second half due to unfinished sentences and placeholder tags. Paragraphing is attempted, but the text is far too short and disjointed to demonstrate clear logical progression or effective overall cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The student attempts some suitable vocabulary related to trends, such as 'increased dramatically' and 'climbed'. However, the range of vocabulary is extremely limited due to the short length of the text, and the presence of raw structural placeholders heavily impedes lexical performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The student demonstrates basic control over simple past and present structures in the opening sentences (e.g., 'the figure stood at 45% in year 1970'). However, there are noticeable grammatical errors such as 'It then fall' (instead of fell) and missing prepositions ('Turning to canada the figure was initially'). The presence of incomplete sentences and template fragments restricts the assessment of grammatical range.
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