Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of obesity in ( USA, England, Canada, Austria, Spain, Korea, Australia, France and Italy) form 1970 to 2020.

Overall, it can be seen that there was increasing trend in all the countries over the period of time. Usa had the highest rates of overweight over the period while Korea with the lowest overweights rate over the period.

The obesity rate in Usa was at around 45% in 1970 which is increased sizeabely and reached at around 75% which is highest among all the countries.In England the rate was at 48% in 1990 which also reached 69% in 2020. The proportion rates of canada was 49% in 1992 which pointed out 55% at the end while Australia and france's overweighted rates were at around 32% and 30% in 1990 which was reached 63% and 43% in 2020. At the end of the period Austria and Italy had at the same rates about 44% but at the begginig of they both were at different rates Austria with 38% and italy with 37%. France overweighted rates started with 30% in 1990 and till the last finihed with 42% while lastly korea with the leastes obesity rates which was at 15% around the year 1999 and in 2020 the rate roses and reached at around 34%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including general trends and specific country comparisons. However, there are numerous inaccuracies in the data reported. For example, the student states that the obesity rate in the USA reached around 75% in 2020 (actual is around 74%), but misreports several other figures, such as Canada's starting rate and Korea's starting rate (stating 15% around 1999, whereas the chart shows 25% in 1998). Furthermore, confusing 'obesity' and 'overweight' occurs throughout the text, as the prompt specifies overweight rates. While the overall trend is identified correctly, the inconsistent and inaccurate data reporting limits the score to a Band 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into three paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph containing the detailed data. While there is a basic logical progression from general trends to specifics, the lack of clear paragraphing for the detailed body content creates a massive block of text that is difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive (e.g., overuse of 'over the period'). Referencing between sentences is occasionally unclear, such as abrupt shifts between countries without adequate transitional phrases. Overall, the organizational structure is basic and warrants a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive. Words like 'rate', 'overweight', and 'period' are repeated excessively. The student attempts some less common vocabulary (e.g., 'sizeabely', 'projected' - though projected was missed, 'highest'), but these attempts are frequently marred by spelling errors ('sizeabely', 'begginig', 'finihed', 'roses' instead of 'rose', 'leastes') and awkward word choices ('overweights rate', 'overweighted rates'). The vocabulary is adequate for basic communication but contains noticeable errors that occasionally impede the reader, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense and agreement (e.g., 'there was increasing trend', 'rate was at around 45% in 1970 which is increased sizeabely and reached', 'rate roses'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, particularly with country names in parentheses and lowercase letters at inappropriate places. While meaning can generally be deciphered, the frequency of grammatical errors causes difficulty for the reader, resulting in a Band 5.0.

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