Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Obesity became the problem for many countries specially for the united states. From the last 50 years obesity rise aprox 80 percents in us. Obesity rate also increases in rest of the word like in england obesity rise to 30 percent. At this rate in future every othger man will be overweight which causes other diseases like diabetes and other problem like blood presure issue. Austrailia, France, Italy, Spain and korea also get increase in obesity but the incarease rate is not alarming yet. It can be controlled easily. Main cause of such high rate of obesity in united states is that the portion sizes of food in the united states are pretty big. in the context the portion sizes are double than rest of the work, also used of processed food cause such overweight. most of the young childeren are also targeted by obrsity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the task by discussing overweight rates in the USA and other countries, but fails to provide a proper summary of the main features or make clear, accurate data-driven comparisons. Furthermore, the response includes a significant amount of outside knowledge and personal speculation (e.g., discussing portion sizes of food and processed foods), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. Crucially, the length requirement of 150 words was not met, as the response contains only 145 words. This results in an incomplete overview and under-developed reporting of the visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text lacks proper paragraphing, being written as a single, disorganised block of text. There is no clear logical progression or structure typical of an IELTS Task 1 response (such as an introductory overview followed by body paragraphs with detailed comparisons). Cohesive devices are minimal or misused (e.g., "in the context"), making the flow disjointed and difficult to follow. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent misspellings and incorrect word forms (e.g., "aprox", "word" instead of "world", "othger", "Austrailia", "incarease", "childeren", "obrsity"). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as "obesity" and "overweight", but the range is severely limited and inaccurate word choices hinder comprehension in several places.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are multiple issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (mixing past projections with present statements), and missing articles (e.g., "for the united states", "raise aprox 80 percents in us"). Punctuation and capitalization errors are widespread throughout the response.

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