Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given line graph illustrates the overweight rate of past and current projects among nine countries, from 1970 to 2020 about 5 decade.

Overall, it is clear that every country project overweight is increasing rapidly over the whole time period where USA was at the top and Korea is at the bottom other seven country are also increasing.

In 1970 USA is the firs country which start the project inn 1980 it slightly gown down to 41 percent then after it increase rapidly around 75 percent as compare to England it start first overweight project in 1990 and reach at the top of 69 percent at the end. Then there was Austria, Italy and France which fluctuate over the time period and end at the point around 45 percent. There is also another similar condition of Canada and Spain they slightly go up and end at around 55 percent. At the bottom of the list there was Korea it start too late, however it did not goes that much it remain at the same of the start of Australia it is about 35 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the task by describing past and projected overweight rates in selected countries. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming the US started the 'project' in 1970 or describing the lines as 'projects' rather than rates. Furthermore, the selection of data is erratic, misreading dates and figures (e.g., stating the US 'gown down to 41 percent' in 1980 when the chart shows 43%). While an overview is attempted, it lacks precision. Because the interpretation of the graph contains fundamental misunderstandings of what the data represents, the task achievement is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is structured into an introduction and a couple of body paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Paragraphing is rudimentary and the connections between sentences are frequently abrupt or confusing. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused (e.g., 'Then there was Austria...', 'There is also another similar condition...'). The sequencing of countries and data points feels random rather than systematically grouped by trends or final values. Consequently, the overall arrangement lacks clear logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms like 'increase', 'go up', and 'at the top/bottom'. There are notable inaccuracies in word choice, such as referring to data trends as 'projects' ('overweight rate of past and current projects') and confusing nouns with verbs ('gown down' instead of gone down). Spelling errors also occur ('firs' instead of first, 'inn' instead of in). The lexical range is barely adequate to communicate the ideas, resulting in frequent strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound sentences, and attempts at complex structures often result in heavy errors or run-on sentences (e.g., 'Then there was Austria, Italy and France which fluctuate over the time period and end at the point around 45 percent.'). There are frequent tense inconsistencies (mixing past and present haphazardly) and punctuation errors. These persistent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader.

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