Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrate the past and current overweight rates,as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries .
Past and projected future overweight rates in slected OECD countries are also shows the proportion overweight according to the different countries Canada,England ,Spain,Austria ,Australia,Italy,France,Korea.
USA has 50% proportion overwight f in 1970 and increase graduly within the period of time till 2020.
England start from 40% and rises within the time till 2020.Furthermore canada firstly decreas then rise with the peroid of time 2020.In addition, the spain face many cricis and the proportion overwight .
Austria and itlay start from 30% and increase within the time and overweight rates in slected country increases within time .
France from 30% increase overweight in 1990 and rises till 2020.
on the other hand ,korea start in 2000 and icrease the overweight within the time till 2020.this is the overall data
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, mentioning several countries such as the USA, England, Canada, and others, along with general upward trends over time. However, the data points provided are inaccurate and poorly reported (for instance, stating the USA started at 50% in 1970 when the chart shows roughly 45%, and misreading other starting points and trends). There is no clear overview paragraph provided to summarise the overall trends across the data. Furthermore, the response trails off at the end into vague generalisations. Because the data reporting is significantly flawed and key features are inadequately developed, it falls within the Band 4 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, consisting instead of a series of short, disjointed sentences presented as a single block of text. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or misused (e.g., abrupt transitions like 'Furthermore canada firstly decreas then rise' and 'on the other hand ,korea start'). There is no clear logical progression or cohesive framework guiding the reader through the data comparisons. Pronoun referencing and overall structural organisation are faulty, making the response difficult to follow. These features align closely with the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'increase', 'rise', and 'proportion overweight'. There are frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'illustrate' (illustrate), 'graduly' (gradually), 'decreas' (decrease), 'peroid' (period), 'spain' (Spain), 'cricis' (crisis), 'itlay' (Italy), and 'icrease' (increase). The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for discussing academic visual data, causing strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are numerous basic errors involving subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate', 'USA has 50% proportion overwight f in 1970 and increase graduly'), missing articles, and incorrect capitalization and punctuation. Complex sentence forms are virtually absent or attempted with severe errors. Because grammatical errors are frequent and regularly obscure the intended meaning, the writing meets the criteria for Band 4.
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