Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graph describes the past and current rate of obesity as well as shows the prediction of overweight population in future of Canada, England, Spain, USA, Austria, Italy, France and Korea.

In 1990,in USA about 53%, France 30%, Australia 32%, Austria 39%, England 48% and Spain 45% population was overweight.

The number of obesed people is excessively increasing with the time as the graph shows in 2020 there will be 75% overweight people in USA and in Canada 69% obesed people.

In 2000, proportion of overweight in Itlay was about 38% and in Korea 25% but in 2020 there will be 42% in Itlay and 35% in Italy.

Korea has Italy has good control on obesity as their proportion of overweight population is less than other firement

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by reporting several data points from the line graph, including figures for the USA, France, Australia, Austria, England, Spain, Italy, and Korea across various years. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reading the data; for instance, the student states that in 2020 there will be '35% in Italy' twice in succession, and misses several key overall trends. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the response contains only 129 words. This under-length issue directly impacts the fullness of the task coverage and limits the development of key features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is organized into several short paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is disjointed and lacks a clear, cohesive structure. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes used incorrectly, such as the sudden shift in subjects without proper transitional phrases. Paragraphing is weak, and the concluding sentence ('Korea has Italy has good control...') contains severe referencing errors and fails to logically tie the points together. While the general arrangement is somewhat discernible, the mechanical flow and repetitive phrasing restrict the score.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'increasing', 'people', and 'rate'. There are also several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'obesed' instead of 'obese', and the garbled expression 'firement' at the end of the text. Although the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary ('overweight population', 'proportion'), the overall range is limited, and inaccuracies in word formation and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple statements with occasional clumsy attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing prepositions ('in USA about 53%', 'in Itlay'), incorrect verb forms ('is excessively increasing with the time'), and severe structural breakdowns in the final sentence ('Korea has Italy has good control...'). These errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning.

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