Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine specific countries.
Overall, USA remained highest rated country amoung nine different nations throughout the period. However, in comparison the Korea started past and future projected overweight rates in 2000 and finised at the bottom in 2020.
Initially, USA past and future overweight projected rates declined by 50% to 40% in 1970 to 1980 after than it sharply increased upwards to 80% throughout the period. England started the past and future project in 1990 by 50% and its trend significantly increased to 70% in whole frame of time. Spain started the project in middle of 1980 and 1990 with 50% of rates as compared to Canada they introduced the overweight rates in the middle of 1990 and 2000. However, Spain and Canada remained equal to 50% in all time period from 2000 to 2020.
Austria rate
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, providing an overview and selecting several countries such as the USA, England, Spain, Canada, and Korea. However, the data points and trends reported contain significant factual inaccuracies and misinterpretations. For instance, the student states that the USA's overweight rate 'declined by 50% to 40% in 1970 to 1980', which contradicts the graph where the figure actually went from 45% to 43%. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, trailing off abruptly with 'Austria rate' at the end before finishing the paragraph or providing a full summary. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay has a basic structure, including an introduction and an overview statement. However, the logical progression breaks down due to confusing transitions and abrupt shifts between countries. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'after than it sharply increased' and 'as compared to Canada they introduced the overweight rates'. Additionally, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and the response lacks a concluding paragraph, trailing off mid-sentence. Referencing and cohesive ties are sometimes faulty, creating a disjointed reading experience that warrants a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'started', 'project', and 'rate'. There are noticeable word choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'highest rated country amoung nine different nations' and 'finised at the bottom'. The range of vocabulary is limited to minimally adequate for discussing charts, and spelling errors like 'amoung' and 'finised' further constrain the score. While the reader can generally grasp the topic, the lexical limitations keep the response firmly at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in faulty syntax and confusion. Examples include 'However, in comparison the Korea started past and future projected overweight rates in 2000 and finised at the bottom in 2020.' Frequent errors in tense usage, prepositions, and sentence construction cause considerable difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also erratic. Because errors are frequent and impede clear communication of the data, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.
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