Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 4.0)
there is a oecd countries graph show uss proportion overweight its show in 1970 usa ratio rate is in 1970 is 50% and in 2020 usa ratio rate is higher and canada england spain austria itlay and all th euopean countries proportion ratio rate iss starting 1980 and the other hand korean proportion ratio started from2000 and now they are higher day by day and canda ratio rate iss day by day up and down situation
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 3.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, coming in at only 76 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While the student attempts to mention some countries from the graph such as the USA, Canada, and Korea, the overview is extremely vague and lacks precise data reporting or meaningful comparisons. Important trends, such as the overall upward projection of overweight rates across all selected OECD countries, are only superficially touched upon with phrases like 'higher day by day'. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand the response to meet the length requirement and provide a clear, well-supported overview featuring specific data points.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks any paragraph structure, consisting of a single, continuous run-on sentence without punctuation. There is a complete absence of formal cohesive devices to link ideas together logically. The progression of information is difficult to follow because clauses are joined informally by repetitive conjunctions like 'and'. To improve, the student needs to divide the essay into logical paragraphs (such as an introduction/overview and body paragraphs) and use appropriate cohesive devices to signal relationships between data points.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted, featuring frequent non-standard phrasing such as 'ratio rate' instead of 'proportion' or 'percentage'. There are severe issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'uss' for 'us', 'itlay' for 'Italy', and 'canda' for 'Canada'. The range is insufficient to convey precise statistical information. To enhance lexical resource, the student should learn and correctly apply topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and trends, such as 'percentage', 'fluctuate', and 'projected'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 3.5
The grammatical structure is severely compromised. The entire submission is a single run-on sentence lacking proper terminal punctuation and capitalisation. There is a complete lack of complex sentence structures, and basic verb forms and subject-verb agreement are frequently mishandled, as seen in 'there is a oecd countries graph show uss proportion overweight'. Errors occur constantly and severely impede the reader's understanding. The student needs to focus on fundamental sentence construction, using periods to separate ideas, and ensuring basic grammatical agreement.
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