Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate how many people were overweight as well as predict future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Overall, overwieght rose at all selected OCED countries but in various figure. USA slightly dipped between 1970 and 1980 from 46% to 43% but after that it rose at 74% between 1980 and 2020.

Meanwhile, England began at 1990 from 48% , rose at 58% in 2000 , despite a little fall if then reached at 69.9% in 2020.

Canada, In Contrast, began at 1994 and fell from 50% to 48% but if then reached to 55% in 2020

Spain, take start from 1989 from 42% and reached at 54% in 2019.

Austria takes start in 1882 from 39% overtook Australia and touch 45% and fell down by 3% then reached to 47% in 2019

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to meet the required word count minimum of 150 words, standing at 135 words. While the student attempts to summarise the line graph by mentioning some figures and countries like the USA and England, the selection of data is erratic and lacks a clear overall picture. Key features and comparisons between countries are underdeveloped, and the overview statement is overly simplistic. To reach a higher level, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is satisfied, present a well-developed overview of main trends, and select and report data more accurately without significant omissions or confusing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text shows some basic organisation with an attempt at an introduction and body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression or logical flow between sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, with awkward transitions like 'Meanwhile', 'Canada, In Contrast,', and 'Spain, take start'. Paragraphing is also somewhat disjointed and abrupt, ending abruptly without a concluding summary. To improve, the student needs to use a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally, ensure logical sequencing of data points, and structure the response into clear, distinct paragraphs that guide the reader smoothly through the comparative analysis.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, struggling with accurate collocations and word forms. There are numerous lexical errors and unnatural expressions throughout the text, such as 'overwieght rose at', 'various figure', 'take start from', and 'touch 45%'. Spelling and word-choice errors, including 'OCED' instead of 'OECD', are noticeable and occasionally cause confusion. For a higher score, the student should employ a more varied and precise range of vocabulary related to data trends, such as verbs and nouns denoting change (e.g., 'fluuctuate', 'decline', 'growth'), and pay closer attention to standard collocational patterns and correct spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly attempted complex sentences that frequently contain errors. There are frequent mistakes in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The line graph illustrate', 'rose at 74%', 'began at 1990', and 'reaches to 55%'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with irregular comma splices and spaces before punctuation marks. To achieve higher bands, the writer must exercise better control over grammatical forms, use accurate prepositions with statistical data, and incorporate a wider mix of error-free complex sentences.

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