Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line chart illustrates the past and current overweight measures, as well as a projected future overweight rates in OECD .

Overall, the chart explain the overweight rates in past and current which is different in USA, SPAIN, AUSTRIA, KOREA, AUSTRALIA, ITALY, CANADA and England.

To begin with USA, ENGLAND, AUSTRIA, SPAIN and AUSTRALIA , in which USA is on the top which is 48 percent overweight rates in start and then steadily increasing, at the end in 2020 shows 75 percent measures which is higher than other. In addition, Austria occupy 39 percent in beginning which is 45 percent in the end while England, Spain and Australia measure in the initiate is 48, 44 and 32 and then they occupy 69,55 and 64 percent in the end.

On the other hand Korea, K

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response only partially addresses the task requirements. Furthermore, the length requirement is not met, as the essay falls well short of the 150-word minimum, stopping abruptly mid-sentence at 134 words. While you attempted to select countries from the graph, the information reported is limited and contains inaccurate figures, such as stating that the USA started at 48 percent. The overview is overly simplistic, merely listing country names rather than summarising the main global trends, and the lack of a complete conclusion leaves the task largely underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation attempted through paragraphs and transitional phrases such as 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand', but overall progression is lacking. The second paragraph is repetitive and uninformative. Referencing and cohesive devices are frequently mechanical or inaccurate, as seen in the abrupt ending and disjointed listing of countries in the body paragraph, which makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow coherently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as using 'measures' instead of 'rates' and 'initiate' instead of 'initial' or 'beginning'. Spelling and word-choice errors, including capitalization issues ('SPAIN', 'AUSTRIA'), occur throughout and cause some difficulty for the reader in interpreting the precise data being presented.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on faulty complex or listing patterns. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and article usage, such as missing subjects or verbs ('the chart explain', 'Austria occupy', 'which is 45 percent in the end'). Sentences like 'in which USA is on the top which is 48 percent overweight rates in start and then steadily increasing' show poor control over basic clause structures and verb forms.

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