Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given line graph demonstrates the past, contemporary and future projection of overweight rates of nine different countries including USA, Austria, Australia, Spain, England, Canada, Italy, France and Korea from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, the overweight data is projected to increase in the future with slight fluctuation in every respective countries where USA has the largest and Korea recorded lowest portion of overweight records since the starting till ending year.

USA recorded around 45% in 1970 and stayed as the highest proportion among all. After slight downfall till 1980 it skyrocketed and predicted to stay roughly 75% in 2020. After this, England stayed around 48% and will reach roundly 69% in 2020. Similarly, Australia experienced sharp increment after mid 1990 and prediceted to reach around 64% in 2020.

To compare, Spain, Austria, Canada, Italy and France had a quite fluctuated data between 2000 and 2010 but projected to increase at the end and reach roughly between 40%to 60% respectively. Lastly, Korea had the lowest proportion of overweight throughtout the period even after the rise from 25% to 35% in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You successfully covered all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons across the nine countries from 1970 to 2020. You accurately highlighted that the USA had the highest proportion and Korea the lowest throughout the period. An effective overview was provided, summarizing the general upward trend and key extremes. However, some parts of your response are slightly under-developed; for example, grouping Spain, Austria, Canada, Italy, and France together resulted in a broad generalization rather than a detailed comparison of their individual trajectories. To reach a higher level, you could have selected and contrasted specific data points for these countries more precisely rather than grouping them into a single vague statement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

Your response has a coherent overall arrangement and a clear logical progression from an introductory summary to specific body paragraphs detailing highest and lowest trends, followed by a comparative group. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or slightly faulty, such as the transition phrase 'To compare,' which does not smoothly link the grouping of countries to the previous paragraph. Additionally, referencing could be improved, as phrases like 'After this' are slightly ambiguous regarding what time or trend they refer to. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of cohesive devices more flexibly and ensure that transitions between paragraphs flow naturally without sounding repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You demonstrated an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'contemporary', 'skyrocketed', and 'downfall'. However, there are several lexical errors and awkward word choices that prevent a higher score, such as writing 'lowest portion of overweight records' instead of 'proportion', 'every respective countries' where 'country' should be singular, and 'throughtout' which contains a spelling error. You also used phrases like 'stayed roughly 75%' where 'stood at' or 'projected to reach' would be more natural. To improve, focus on precise word choices, correct collocations related to data reporting, and careful proofreading to eliminate minor spelling and morphological slips.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempted a mix of simple and complex sentence forms to describe past data and future projections, utilizing structures like 'where USA has the largest and Korea recorded lowest portion'. There is good control over basic tense structures, but your response contains several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and missing articles. For instance, writing 'where USA has' instead of 'where the USA had', and 'predicted to stay' missing the auxiliary verb 'is predicted'. Punctuation and prepositions also need attention, such as 'between 2000 and 2010 but projected to increase'. To move up, you need to produce a higher frequency of error-free complex sentences and ensure accurate use of articles and tense consistency when mixing past data with future projections.

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