Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The following graphy illustrates the rates of overweight in nine different coutries from 1970 to 2020 with projection for the future

overall the overweight rate increased in all nine countries . The highest rate regaring overweight was Usa amoung all the nine countries , secondly England on its peak after Usa . Furthermore other six coutries had low rate like Canada, Spain, Austria,Italy,Australia and france. Korea was at lowest rate amoung all the countries.

In 1970 Usa were at 70% overweight rate . England was at 40% Canada had low rate almost 35% . Other countries like Austria Italy France slightly at 35%. South korea was lowest peak about 20%

To conclude the whole diagram it is obsereved that the overweight rate were increased in major nation but some countries countroled it which is a very positive sign because overweight is harmful for overall health of every individual lived in different countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by mentioning an overall increase in overweight rates and identifying extremes such as the USA and South Korea. However, the report only responds to the task minimally. Several data points cited in the text are inaccurate or misread compared to the visual data; for instance, the writer claims the USA was at 70% in 1970 when the chart shows it at 45%, and misplaces the relative positions of countries. Furthermore, there is no clear selection of the main trends or meaningful comparisons across the nine countries, leading to an underdeveloped and partially inaccurate summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The writing shows some organization with a basic introduction, body, and conclusion, but there is no clear overall progression of information. Paragraphing is rudimentary and sentences are strung together with very basic or missing cohesive devices. Referencing is often unclear, such as shifting abruptly between countries and years without logical sequencing. While the text attempts an overall structure, the mechanical presentation and lack of clear transitional links prevent the ideas from flowing logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, utilizing restricted terms like "rate", "country", and "high" or "low" throughout the response. There are frequent spelling errors (such as "graphy", "coutries", "regaring", "amoung", "obsereved", "countroled") and awkward word choices ("secondly England on its peak", "South korea was lowest peak"). This limited range and frequent lexical inaccuracy cause strain for the reader and reflect a restricted vocabulary suitable for conveying only simple information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple descriptive statements with frequent errors that distort meaning. There are multiple issues with subject-verb agreement and plurals, such as "Usa were at 70%", "other six coutries had low rate", and "the overweight rate were increased". Articles and prepositions are frequently misused or omitted, and punctuation is weak, including missing capitalization for proper nouns like "Usa" and "south korea". These frequent errors interrupt comprehension throughout the text.

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