Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the past, current and projected future overweight rates, in nine different OECD countries from 1970 to 2020. Rate are measured in percentages.

Overall, USA remained the highest economically strong country with a continuous growth while Korea found it very hard to become stable.

In 1972 USA had 45% of economic growth and there was a slight decline of 42% by 1980 after that they had showed steady increase in growth of 75% by 2020. On the other hand England and spain started growing by mid 1980s of 43% and 47% respectively. England kept pushing themselves with a significant growth ended with 69% by 2020. Although, Spain had seen fluctuations throughout the years. Canada hitted 50% by 1996 after that they were steadily growing with the Spain and ended55% by 2019.

Furthurmore, Austria started started growing from 1978 with 39% of increase after that they were stable by mid 1990s and then they had a growth of 45% by mid 2000s after that they had little bit of decline and ended with 45% by 2020. Australia and France showed showed significant growth together ended with 45% by 2020. Compared to the Italy they started with 35% after that with some fluctuations they ended with the 45% by 2020. Korea on the othe hand were the least contributing country in terms of economic growth they had 30% growth by 2009 and ended with 35% by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student has fundamentally misunderstood the chart's topic, repeatedly referring to overweight rates as 'economic growth' (e.g., 'In 1972 USA had 45% of economic growth'). This represents a significant misinterpretation of the visual data. However, the student does attempt to report trends and figures for several countries, such as noting the USA rising to 74% (though written as 75%) and referencing England, Spain, and other nations. Despite these attempts to cover the main features, the misidentification of the core topic severely undermines task fulfilment. Based on the descriptors, this performance aligns with a Band 4.5 to 5.0, where the task is addressed only partially and key concepts are misunderstood.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction and followed by body paragraphs grouping different countries. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and cohesive devices are used clumsily or repetitively (e.g., 'after that they had showed', 'on the other hand', 'although'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points are being compared. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical flow requires better transitional phrases and clearer connections between sentences. This corresponds to Band 5.0, where some organisation is evident, but overall progression lacks clarity and cohesion is frequently faulty.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The most prominent lexical issue is the persistent confusion of medical/health statistics (overweight rates) with economic data ('economic growth', 'least contributing country in terms of economic growth'). Beyond this severe semantic error, the student uses basic vocabulary with occasional attempts at less common items ('fluctuations', 'significant growth'). There are noticeable spelling and word-form errors (e.g., 'hitted', 'Furthurmore'). These errors and inappropriate word choices cause significant strain for the reader and prevent the score from reaching Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'Rate are measured', 'USA remained the highest economically strong country with a continuous growth', 'started started growing', 'ended with 45% by 2020'). Punctuation is also erratic, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate conjunctions or full stops. While some simple structures are accurate, the frequency of grammatical errors causes difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor profile.

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