Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE LINE GRAPH ARE ILLUSTRATES THE PAST AND FUTURE PROJECTED RATE WAS OVERWEIGHT PEOPLE IN NINE SELECTED OECD.

OVERALL, THE PERCENTAGE OF OVERWEIGHT PEOPLE IS EXPECTED TO INCREASE IN MOST COUNTRIES. THE USA HAS THE HIGHEST RATE, WHILE KOREA WAS THE LOWEST RATE. THE RATES IN ENGLAND WAS QUITE HIGH ADDITION IN CANADA ARE ALSO QUITE HIGH.

IN THE USA, THE RATE WAS ABOUT AT 45% IN 1970. IT FELL DECREASE AT 42% IN 1980. BUT AFTER THEN INCREASED. IT REACHED ABOUT 60% IN 2000 AND IS EXPECTED TO RICE TO MORE THAN 70% BY 2020. ENGLAND ALSO SHOWS A CLEAR INCREASE, FROM ABOUT 48% IN 1990 TO NEARLY 68% IN 2010.

CANADA HAD A RATE OF AROUND 44% IN THE EARLY 1990S. IT INCREASES TO ABOUT 50% AND IT REACH AROUND 54% IN 2020.SPAIN ALSO RISE SLOWLY FROM ABOUT 42% TO 54%. AUSTRALIA STAY AROUND 38% TO 45%. WHILE AUSTRALIA AND FRANCE ALSO INCREASES GRADUALLY.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the task only partially by providing an overview and selecting some main features, such as mentioning that the USA has the highest rate and Korea the lowest. However, the data presented contains several inaccuracies when compared to the visual source, such as stating the US rate in 1980 was 42% or misrepresenting data points for Canada and Spain. Some countries listed in the prompt are omitted, and the information is sometimes too general or inadequately supported with precise figures, which prevents a fully developed account of the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident with the use of paragraphs, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or used inaccurately, such as abrupt transitions between sentences and paragraphs like 'ADDITION IN CANADA ARE ALSO QUITE HIGH' and repetitive sentence openings. Pronoun referencing and linking between ideas are faulty, meaning the information does not flow smoothly from introduction to body paragraphs and conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that occasionally impede understanding. There are frequent word choice and word form errors, such as 'RATE WAS OVERWEIGHT PEOPLE' instead of 'rate of overweight people', and 'RICE' instead of 'rise'. Attempts at less common vocabulary are unsuccessful due to poor collocation and inaccuracies, though simple vocabulary like 'increase' and 'highest' is generally understood.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent basic errors throughout the text. The student attempts simple and some complex sentences, but these are often faulty, featuring frequent agreement and tense errors, such as 'THE LINE GRAPH ARE ILLUSTRATES', 'THE RATES IN ENGLAND WAS', and 'IT FELL DECREASE'. Punctuation is also problematic, and these frequent errors cause difficulty and strain for the reader.

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