Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the change in obesity rates following the year 1970 and predicts the upcoming changes in this data.

Overall, it is evident that overweight rates experience a general upwards trend across all of the nine countries. A similar change is expected for the future projection of this data. USA accounts for greatest obesity proportion throughout the period while Korea is the country with least overweight population.

The increase in obesity is particularly profound in countries like USA, England and Australia. While USA started off around 45%, the rate dipped slightly in the first decade before rising upto 70% by 2010, it is expected to grow further. The rate in England was approximately 47% in 1990, which is likely to reach 70% in future. Australia, which had a lower initial rate, recorded a similar spike in obesity proportions eventually taking over Canada's place as the third most obese country.

On the other hand, some regions had a relatively lower growth in rates. Canada is expected to rise above its starting point of 50%, ending right below Spain. Austria Italy and France, which had initial overweight rates between 40% and 30%, are predicted to get stacked respectively in future with each of them maintaining their originial ranking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a clear overview of the broad upward movement and identify the USA as highest and Korea as lowest, which captures important features. You also select relevant countries for comparison. However, some details are inaccurate or insufficiently precise: the USA reaches about 69% in 2010 and is projected to 74% by 2020, rather than simply “70% by 2010”; England reaches about 69% by 2019, not an unspecified future point. The claim that Australia takes over Canada as the third-highest is not supported by the final figures: Australia is about 64%, while Canada and Spain are both around 55%. The final comparison of Austria, Italy and France is also unclear, and their rankings do not all remain unchanged. Develop these comparisons more carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a general overview, and two paragraphs grouping the stronger and weaker increases. This makes the main direction of the report easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal the structure. To make the progression more precise, organise the details around clear comparisons and time points, rather than moving from one country to another without consistently stating the endpoint. For example, the final paragraph’s “stacked respectively” and “maintaining their original ranking” do not clearly explain the countries’ relative positions. Some linking is also slightly mechanical; use references such as “these three countries” only when the group is unambiguous. The paragraphing is effective, but clearer internal sequencing would strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “rates,” “proportion,” “projection,” “dipped,” and “growth,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more varied phrasing, such as “a relatively lower growth.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a graph: “obesity” is used where the chart measures people who are overweight, “spike” suggests a sudden rise, and “taking over Canada’s place” is informal and does not accurately describe the comparison. “Stacked respectively” is also an unsuitable collocation, while “originial” contains a spelling error. Prefer precise reporting language such as “rose steadily,” “ranked third,” and “retained their relative positions.” This would improve accuracy and control without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “Australia, which had a lower initial rate,” and a contrast structure beginning “While USA started off…”. Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions reduce accuracy. In the long “While” sentence, the clauses are joined with a comma, creating a run-on; divide it or connect the clauses with “and.” The overview shifts from past data to “rates experience” and “is expected,” so make the time reference consistent. Articles are also missing in “USA” and “Austria Italy and France”; write “the USA” and separate the country names with commas. Check punctuation and sentence boundaries, especially when combining several trends, to make the complex structures more controlled.

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