Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares the overweight rates of the nine selected OECD countries in the past, present, and future. All figures are illustrated as percentages.

It shows that the highest overweight rate is in the USA, starting in 1970, at 45%, then it fell slightly, and then rose to 75% in 2020, but Korea is the lowest from 1998, at 25%, and then rose to 35% in 2020. Australia and England increased strictly from 1990. Astria, Spain, France, and Canada started with fluctuations and rose slowly, and little. Italy started in 1995.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the graph’s general subject and report several relevant features, including the USA’s rise to about 75% and Korea’s increase from roughly 25% to 35%. However, the response only minimally summarises the data: it gives no clear overall comparison across the countries and omits important endpoint patterns, such as Australia reaching about 64% and England about 69%. Some descriptions are also inaccurate or too vague: the USA rate initially dips before rising, while saying several countries “started with fluctuations and rose slowly” does not distinguish their different trends. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, which limits the detail and coverage possible. Add a clear overview and select key comparisons with supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the graph, then mentions the highest and lowest rates, followed by other countries. This gives the reader a simple route through the information. However, it is presented as only two paragraphs, with the second combining many separate observations in a compressed list. The links between ideas are limited, and phrases such as “but Korea is the lowest” create an abrupt comparison rather than a clearly organised overview. Group countries by similar levels or trends, and use separate paragraphs for the overview and selected details. More explicit connections between the figures would help the short report progress logically rather than read as a series of brief statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “overweight rates,” “percentages,” “fell slightly,” and “rose,” so the main topic and basic movements are understandable. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated reliance on simple verbs and broad descriptions such as “rose slowly, and little.” Some word choices are imprecise for describing a graph: “increased strictly” does not naturally express a steady upward trend, and “started with fluctuations” is too general to convey the countries’ differing patterns. There is also a spelling error in “Astria.” Use more precise trend language and check country names. For example, distinguish a gradual rise from a fluctuation or a plateau, and describe changes with terms such as “climbed steadily” or “remained broadly stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Most of the short response is understandable, and you attempt to combine several stages of change in the sentence about the USA: it “fell slightly, and then rose.” The grammar is generally controlled in simple statements, but the range is narrow and some sentence patterns are awkward. In “Australia and England increased strictly from 1990,” the countries are made the subject of “increased,” rather than their rates, and the sentence does not clearly express the trend. The long sentence beginning “It shows that” also joins several comparisons with “but” without clear parallel structure. Practise varied, accurate constructions such as “The rate in Australia rose…” and use separate sentences to report distinct country trends.

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