Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates past and present overweight rates, additionally a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Overall, graph demonstrates that USA wiil remain top teir in weight percentage till all years. Secondly, England will maintain second position. Spain will surpass Canada with small growth rate. Australia has highest growth rate so it will cross over multiple countries and will reach at 3rd postion. Where Austria, Italy, France will coinside at singular point till the end of graph. Korea will little growth rate will remain with the least percentage till the end of graph.

According to graph, The survey was initially started from USA in 1970, at that time proportion was almost 45%, and then it suddenly dropped but with time it bounces back and now it is predicted as top teir and will end with the proportion of about 75. Further England had proportion of 45 in 1990 but it will surge to almost 70% till 2020. Canad was above the Spain in1995 but at the end of graph both will reach at about 55%.

Austria maintained its position will little fluctuation it strated its survey in 1980 with 39% and till 2020 it will reach at 45%. Moreover, Australia has the highest growth rate will surpass many countries and estimated to be reach at 3rd position with 65% till 2020. On the other hand France and italy has no big difference, both will meet with Austria. Korea remains at last.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important overall patterns: the USA remains highest, Korea remains lowest, and Australia rises substantially. You also make relevant comparisons, such as Canada and Spain ending at similar levels. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: England is not consistently second, since Australia is projected to overtake it by the end, and Austria, Italy and France do not converge at one point; their final rates are approximately 47%, 46%, and 44%. The claim that Spain surpasses Canada is also not supported by the final figures, which are close, with Canada slightly higher. The response covers the task, but some comparisons need more precise support and development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it groups several countries together. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The overview moves abruptly from England to Spain and Australia, then to three countries said to coincide, without a clear organising principle. Linking expressions such as “Secondly,” “Where,” and “On the other hand” are sometimes awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The final paragraph also shifts between Austria, Australia, France, Italy and Korea. Organise details into clearer groups—for example, the highest-rising countries and the lower-rate countries—and use references and transitions that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “growth rate,” “fluctuation,” and “surpass,” and the reader can generally understand the trends you intend to describe. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “top teir,” “singular point,” “bounces back,” and “reach at 3rd position.” Spelling errors, including “wiil,” “postion,” “Canad,” and “strated,” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases are repeated, particularly “till the end of graph.” Aim for standard, precise language for describing data, such as “remain the highest,” “converge,” and “by 2020,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “but,” “where,” and “on the other hand.” Nevertheless, errors occur often enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “Korea will little growth rate will remain” has an incomplete grammatical structure, while “Australia has the highest growth rate will surpass many countries” joins clauses without a suitable connector. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “graph demonstrates” and “France and italy has.” Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, and separate or connect ideas correctly. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to follow.

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