Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph gives information about overweight period and future projections rate in nine different countries.It shows what the percentage of current overweight peoples and what is next after some years.

USA overweight percentage is 45% in 1970, but it will increase graduallay over five years touches around 75%.In Australia overweight rate is less then 40%, but it increase dramatically touches around 63%.

Austria the percentage become pleatued between 1980 and 1990, around 38%, but

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the graph’s general subject and reports a few relevant figures, including the USA’s rise from about 45% to roughly 75% and Australia’s increase from below 40% to around 63%. However, it covers only a small part of the chart and gives no clear overview comparing the countries’ overall patterns or projected outcomes. The statement about Austria being stable at around 38% between 1980 and 1990 is only partly supported: the chart shows approximately 39% in 1983 and 1991, rather than a continuous plateau across that period. The response also stops mid-sentence and does not report the other countries. At 75 words, it does not meet the required minimum of 150, so the task is addressed only minimally. To improve, provide a complete overview and select several accurate comparisons across the nine countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the graph, followed by separate comments on the USA, Australia and Austria. This gives the reader some sense of the intended sequence. However, the response is very short and ends abruptly with “but”, so the final point is incomplete and there is no concluding overview. Connections between ideas are limited, and the repeated country-by-country openings do not develop a clear progression or comparison. The opening also repeats the idea of percentages in two closely related clauses. To make the organisation clearer, use a brief introduction, an overview of the main trends, and body paragraphs grouping countries with similar or contrasting rates; complete each sentence and use linking phrases to show comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, such as “percentage”, “rate”, “increase” and “around”, which allows the reader to understand the general topic and direction of change. There are also attempts at trend language, including “increase dramatically” and “become pleatued”. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “overweight period” does not describe the data, “overweight peoples” is not an appropriate phrase, and “touches around” is an awkward way to report a figure. Spelling errors such as “graduallay”, “pleatued” and “less then” also reduce control. Use precise chart language such as “the proportion of people who were overweight”, “rose to” and “remained stable”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a contrast using “but”, and the main direction of change is generally understandable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening contains a faulty construction: “It shows what the percentage … and what is next after some years.” In “it will increase … touches around 75%”, the verbs are not joined correctly, while “In Australia … but it increase” has a subject–verb agreement error and an inconsistent verb form. The final Austria sentence is unfinished, and punctuation spacing is uneven. Most sentences are short and follow similar patterns, so there is little evidence of a wider range. Practise complete clauses with accurate tense and agreement, for example, “The rate is projected to rise to about 75% by 2020,” and proofread sentence boundaries.

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