Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided line graph illustrates present obesity percentages and predicted future obesity rate in nine countries.

In the USA, overweight proportion of people was about 45% in 1970. However, this gone to increase dramatically and will become almost 72% by 2020. In England, obesity rates were approximately 48% in 1990 and afterwards these rates became near about 62% in 2010. By 2020, these may reach upto 70%. Overweight rates in Austraila was about 32% in 1990 then dramatically rise upto 50% in 2000. Gradually these rates of obesity will become near about 65% in 2020.

Canada experienced 50% obesity rate in 1990 and gradually these rate will increase and become about 53% by 2020. Rates of obesity in Spain were about 42% in 1985 and will become same rate of Canada by 2020. In Austria, rates of obesity were about 39% in 1980 and will become almost 47% by 2020. Korea experienced almost 24% obesity rates in 1998 and these rates of obesity will become about 36% by 2020.

Overall, the USA outrace all the mentioned country in obesity rates while korea experienced very low overweight ration from all above the mentioned countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad upward pattern and make relevant comparisons, including the USA as the highest and Korea as the lowest. Several reported figures are reasonably close to the graph, such as England at about 48% in 1990 and Korea at roughly 24% near the start of its series. However, the task is only partly covered: France and Italy are omitted, and the overview is brief and does not summarise the overall rise across the countries. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the USA is about 74% in 2020, not 72%; Spain is about 55%, rather than matching Canada at 53–55%; and Canada’s series begins in 1994, not 1990. Select the main trends across all nine countries and check dates and endpoints carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, understandable structure: it moves through groups of countries and ends with an overall statement. Time markers such as “in 1990,” “by 2020” and “afterwards” help readers follow the chronology. However, the progression is mostly a sequence of country-by-country details rather than a clearly organised comparison, and the overview appears only at the end. Linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “these rates” and “will become.” Grouping countries by their starting or ending levels, then placing a concise overview near the beginning, would create a clearer progression. Make references explicit as well, so phrases such as “these rates” always have an unmistakable antecedent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the subject, including “percentages,” “rates,” “dramatically” and “gradually.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a graph. “Obesity” is used where the chart measures people who are overweight, and phrases such as “outrace all the mentioned country” and “very low overweight ration” are difficult to interpret. Spelling errors, including “Austraila” and “korea,” also reduce control. Aim for precise, varied trend language and standard collocations. For example, describe a rate as “rose” or “increased,” and say that one country “had the highest proportion,” rather than using race-related wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and some attempts to connect events with time clauses, so the main message is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. Examples include “this gone to increase,” “rates … was,” “then dramatically rise,” and “these rate will increase.” The final sentence also has faulty agreement and an unclear construction: “the USA outrace all the mentioned country.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise accurate past and future forms, subject–verb agreement, and plural nouns; then combine clauses only when you can control their grammar reliably.

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