Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graps illustrates the past and future overweight rates in organisation for economic co-operation and development selected nine countries

Overall, in USA proportion plump was recorded the highest and it grow over the time frame, while the Korea was counted at the lowest the proportion, Furthermore the other seven countries the percentage of overweight was increased

To commence with, in 1970 the USA was started at 46% followed by it slightily decline, but it grow countinusly and in 1990 stood at opproxmitaly at 51% and followed the upword trand in 2010 it was at 70% and its peak position in 2020 at 75%, However Korea at 30% in 2000 and it increased slightly and it stood at 35% in 2020, while England was started at just below the 50 % in 1990. after decade at 58% and in 2020 was at under 70%

In contrast, spain proportion was at 43% in 1990 and its overweight fluctuate. After two decade it increased 7% only followed by it was at 55%, while the other countries obese rates increased over the period

In conclusion, the nine democratic countries that work together on economic policy and development standards was increased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that the USA had the highest rate and Korea the lowest, and you report several relevant figures, including the USA’s rise to about 75% and Korea’s increase to around 35%. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: most of the other countries are grouped together rather than compared, and the overview does not clearly distinguish their different levels or trends. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: Korea is shown at about 25% in 1998, not 30% in 2000, and Spain’s starting point is around 43% in 1987 rather than 1990. The final claim about all nine countries increasing is too broad, since the USA initially declined and some series fluctuate. Select and compare the main patterns more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing selected countries. This gives the reader some sense of the task’s structure. However, progression is not consistently clear: the final paragraph begins “In contrast” without establishing a clear contrast, and the conclusion repeats a general claim rather than adding a useful summary. Linking expressions such as “while,” “followed by,” and “after” are sometimes used inaccurately or mechanically, making relationships between figures difficult to follow. Several long sentences combine multiple countries and time points without clear boundaries. Group the countries by meaningful patterns, use one main comparison per sentence, and ensure each paragraph has a distinct purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased,” “decline,” and “fluctuate,” and you attempt to describe peaks and trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “proportion plump” is not an appropriate way to describe the data, and “the nine democratic countries” misidentifies the countries’ relevance to the graph. Spelling errors such as “graps,” “slightily,” “countinusly,” and “opproxmitaly” also reduce clarity. Use precise terms such as “overweight rate” or “proportion of the population classified as overweight,” and check spelling and natural combinations of words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences using clauses and linking words, but control is weak: complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the account difficult to follow. Examples include “it grow over the time frame,” “the USA was started at 46%,” and “the other seven countries the percentage … was increased,” which show problems with tense, passive forms, and sentence construction. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the Korea was counted at the lowest the proportion.” Punctuation and capitalisation are unreliable, particularly where a full stop is followed by a lowercase “after.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and build shorter, complete sentences before combining them with subordinate clauses.

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