Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compares the past and current overweight rates ,as well as, projected future in selected nine OECD countries.

Overall, there is an increase in the proportion overweight in all the nine OECD countries with USA having the highest rate and Korea as the lowest rate.

In 1970, the proportion overweight of USA was about 45% which rose to about 74% by the end of 2020.England was at 48% in 1990 and increased to 69% in 2020.Canada proportion overweight also increased from 49% to 55%.Spain also faced an incline from 43% to 55% approximately.

Austria and Italy also saw an upward increase from 39% to 46% and 37% to 45% respectively. In the start France faced a very complex variation from 1990 to 200 then it ramained at linear increase and attained the maximum value of 44% in 2020. While Korea remained at the lowest among all the countries with minimum value of about 25%i in 2000 and amximum value in 2020 about 34%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern of rising rates and correctly note that the USA is highest and Korea lowest by the end of the period. Several reported endpoints are also broadly accurate, including the USA at about 74% and France at 44%. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly compare the countries’ levels or highlight that the USA and Australia finish notably higher than most others. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: England begins around 47% in 1991, not 48% in 1990; France’s early movement is described as “very complex” without explaining its fluctuations; and Korea’s final figure is closer to 35%. The response reports selected data but leaves important trends underdeveloped, so make the overview more informative and support it with precise comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, an overall statement and a body that groups several countries together. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression is mostly a sequence of country-by-country statements rather than a clearly organised comparison. The transition from the USA and England to Canada and Spain, then to Austria and Italy, is understandable but not based on an explicit grouping such as highest, middle and lowest rates. Linking is also sometimes awkward: “While Korea…” is left as a fragment, and “In the start” does not clearly connect the point to the preceding sentence. Organise the body into meaningful groups and use clear comparisons to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion overweight,” “projected,” “variation” and “linear increase,” and the main meaning is generally recoverable. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing a graph. “Faced an incline” is not a natural way to report a rising rate, while “very complex variation” is vague and does not identify the actual fluctuations. “Attained the maximum value” also overstates France’s position, since it is not the highest country overall. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “ramained” and “amximum,” and the phrase “in the start” is not idiomatic. Choose precise trend verbs and check spelling and collocations to improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, control of sentence structure and punctuation is uneven. The opening has misplaced commas in “rates ,as well as,” and “projected future” lacks a grammatical link such as “rates.” In “Canada proportion overweight also increased,” the possessive form is missing, while “In the start France faced…” has an unclear sentence structure. The final “While Korea remained…” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence, and several sentences run together without spaces after full stops. Use complete clauses, check articles and possessives, and punctuate each sentence clearly; this will make your range of structures more effective.

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