Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the rates of past and current rates of overweight peoples and also projected the future rate in nine selected countries from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, it can been seeing that the USA should have highest rate of overweight approximately 71%.While the proportion of overweight population in Korea has less rate which is exceeding to approximately 35%.

To begin with, the rate of obsity in USA should be dramaticaly increases from 45% to 71% in 1979 to 2020. In England, the rate of overweight should be reaches to 70% from 1990 to 2020. In Canada, the rates first not go high then it will raises to 55%. In Spain, the proportion of overweight fluctuate from 1985 to 2020 and its range is about 55%.

Morever, the proportion of overweight in Austria and Itly both started in normal rate then iit will increases and decreases and at the end they will stop at equal rate approximately 45%. In Australia the rates are significiantly increases approximately 65%. In France, at the start the rates fluctuate and then it will raises anout 45%. At last, in Korea , the rates are modrately increase from 2000 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that most countries rise over time, and your overview correctly places the USA highest and Korea lowest by the end. You also cover all nine countries, which gives the report relevant scope. However, several details are inaccurate or too vague: the USA begins at about 45% in 1972 and reaches roughly 74% in 2020, not 71% from 1979; England ends near 69%, rather than 70%; and the USA’s rise is not consistently upward because it dips slightly at the start. The overview would be stronger if it compared the countries more clearly and highlighted the generally rising trend. Some country descriptions, such as Canada’s, do not explain the main changes sufficiently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing groups of countries. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moreover” help signal movement between sections. However, the progression within the detail paragraphs is mostly a list of countries, rather than a clearly organised comparison of higher and lower rates or similar trends. Some linking language is awkward or repetitive, and the overview’s contrast between the USA and Korea is not expressed clearly. Grouping countries by their final levels or by the scale of their increases would make the information easier to follow. Check punctuation around sentence openings and avoid unnecessary commas or spacing, as these also interrupt the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “proportion,” “rate,” “fluctuate,” and “approximately,” and the reader can generally understand which countries and trends you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “overweight peoples,” “started in normal rate,” and “stop at equal rate.” Spelling errors—including “obsity,” “dramaticaly,” “significiantly,” and “modrately”—are noticeable and reduce precision. Repetition of “rate” and “increases” also makes the descriptions less varied. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “the proportion of people who were overweight” and “rose steadily,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. Examples include “it can been seeing,” “the USA should have highest rate,” and “the rate … should be reaches,” where the verb forms and sentence patterns are faulty. Tense shifts are frequent: the report moves between past data and “should,” “will,” and “will be” without a clear reason. Articles and agreement also need attention, as in “the highest rate” and “the rates … increases.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise describing chart data with consistent present or past forms, for example, “The rate rose from … to …,” and build accurate sentences before adding more complex structures.

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